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on the edge Haibun

i grew up in a small town called Costa Mesa, literally meaning “table by the coast.” my grandfather had lived, farmed and raised a family there, since the ’20’s. i grew to be a young man in this village without freeways, highways or many stop lights. the place seemed to be ideally situated. it was about seven miles from the ocean, had good roads to either Newport Beach or Huntington Beach. thus, it was on the edge of the Pacific Ocean. we did not have the morning or june / july fog of the beach towns, but we could quickly get to the ocean and thoroughly enjoy it.

on the edge of the

ocean our home stood by

ready for the fun


Author notes

Author's Note's:  Haibun combines Haiku and prose, for a fine different feeling in Japanese style poetry. This prose is absolutely truthful and was inspired by my fond memories of growing up near the coast of Southern California.  

 

The beach photograph is a view of the Pacific Ocean from a bluff near Morro Bay. 

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  • Draig aine gold member
    September 30
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    this is an amazing piece

    a new form for me , bit one of great magesty, the pine and salt air rise and ride the wind of sumer


  • Sandal
    September 2, 2008

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    I grew up in a small city, well, beyond the edge of it, surrounded by trees. I love the freedom and history your writing expresses. This is a new form for me, I have to try it.


  • Olivias Violin
    August 28, 2008

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    What a wonderful place to grow up!

    I live near the Big Cypress Swamp (part of the Everglades).


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    August 27, 2008

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    Something new!

    This is quite interesting! Never saw this before & am sure many here will be interested in this! I'm on the edge of Sanity & now I think I can write a Senryu/Haiku perhaps Haibun about that! I see that you didn't use the 5/7/5 syllable count. Eh...so what? Those 'rules' don't seem necessary with the modern Haiku form & everything is morphing anyway right? The only thing that will never 'morph' for me are His Ten Commandments & His Word! Nice job here friend.