I take your lies,
you take my love.
I take the pain you hand me,
you take the joy I never get.
I take your unfaithfulness,
you take my complete devotion.
I take the tears you make me cry,
you take the laughs I never get to laugh.
I take the scars you leave on me,
you take my heart and break it into two.
I take this life and hate it,
you take this life and enjoy it.
I can't take this anymore.
Author notes
"take" is my word.
A contest entry
- What's Your Word? by Poetess12.
2400 points, ended September 8, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - favourite prewrites, please; by epitome.
500 points, ended August 14, 81 entries
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Comments
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Good Luck!
I think this poem would have been better as a single six-line-or-so stanza, it all seemed a bit much really. Nice idea though.
Good luck. -
I like how you used the word "take" in your poem.
and how you you end it with "I can't take this anymore."
After saying " I take the scars you leave on me,
you take my heart and break it into two.
I take this life and hate it,
you take this life and enjoy it.
sad but true for some.
Thank you for your entry.
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