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Darkest Of Days

 

 

There are days when I just can’t be bothered
and days when the world just seems fine,
there are days when the pain becomes too much to bear
and days that I wish were not mine.

To wake in the morning and get out of bed
and to know that my world does exist,
to look in the mirror but not see myself
and to question if I will be missed.

Those are the darkest of days that I know
with no purpose or need to go on,
I’m dying inside but I’ll put on a show
and my smiles although fake will have shone.

Though I’m not an actor I’ll fulfil my role,
the words I shall know off by heart,
a performance that comes from deep in my soul
I won’t falter, before I depart.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    September 9, 2008

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    Beautiful flow of the unforced rhyming verse and its content is very relatable.
    Congratulations on the award!


  • moonbumps silver member
    August 28, 2008
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    I understand and I'm here-anytime.
    Moonie xxx


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 27, 2008

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    " ... days that I wish were not mine."

    Good idea well expressed.
    Good luck in the contest.


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 27, 2008
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    " ... days that I wish were not mine."

    Good idea well expressed.
    Good luck in the contest.


  • Lily of the Valley
    August 27, 2008

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    I think many of us have days like this for our own individual reasons but we struggle on through to emerge the other side and carry on with life. Possibly the worst feeling associated with this kind of experience is solitude which promotes further darkness. Your poem captures the darkest days with the clearest possible images and emtions. The last line and infact the complete stanza shows an inner strength of character that is the positive element to work back towards the light. Good luck in the contest


  • arafura gold member
    August 27, 2008
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    I know the journey you are taking my friend. Remember your friends are walking beside you.

  • Shayla Walker
    August 27, 2008
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    Well I see you showed us your soul.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    August 27, 2008
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    It sounds like some days you carry alot of pain. I hope things get better.

    Mike


  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 27, 2008

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    So many have experienced this feeling and survived

    I myself once felt as though I were just floating not being seem not being heard just floating in a nonexistent world and found from listening to only my thoughts and not hearing the thoughts of others often we build our own prisons within. What we feel about ourselves is not what others feel its just we never ask others being we are so sure of ourselves .Yet when we l;earn to reach out and see others and know they often are feeling the same as we are and when that hits you then you ask yourself why do we do this to ourselves for we hold the key to joy and life yet we refuse to unlock the door and let others in to help us find our way back home .
    I knew a few people that commited suicide and no one ever knew they were evn unhappy for they hid it so well and in their notes they had "If you only knew my pain" I so cried for how could they when you kept it locked inside .Talk to me anytime I will answer

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