you told me
that you were
devastated and
all alone and you
wished I could
be there.
but I was away
in a drunken haze
of un-heartbrokenness.
you were my best
friend for years
and here
I was
forgetting about you.
and all the
promises I made.
they were tiny
fading specimens
that I washed off
my hands with soap
and didn't even
choke back tears.
and didn't even
care that you were
scared of life.
I replaced you a
little bit
each morning
with some toast
and some new
degenerate morons.
and days and days
some days
turned into
forever, and
"this is some
weather we're
having huh?"
when I came
home you didn't
know me anymore.
I wore nothing
on my sleeves and
said I'm leaving
for good.
it should have
ended this way
and not with
some dates
and an organ-
less body.
Author notes
not exactly a companion piece to "miss you", but almost.
A contest entry
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I replaced you a
little bit
each morning
with some toast
I found this to be emotionally powerful and yet delicately penned...the deeper sentiments floating like dust motes played on the strings of practiced nonchalance and glowing in cooling coals.
Exquisite.
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i just really like this, a lot !
meg
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i wore nothing on my sleeves... LOVE THAT LINE!!!! ...
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Wow. This is a really good piece. And the funny part is that I'm not really sure why. There aren't a lot of metaphors or images but I found myself getting all wrapped up in it. It was really interesting and engaging. You've done a good job of expressing yourself here.
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Aww
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