The Kiss

I remember the first time we held hands
When we went out
We both wanted to but were scared
Of rejection.
But I knew you wanted me.
And I surely wanted you.
Then we grasped each other in our arms,
And it happened!
The kiss.
So tender, so gentle.
But gentle didn't last long.

Gods of the kiss

@GGG2008

From the upcoming musical Closing In On Forever by Gargano/Ringo

A contest entry

A Kiss by strangerforeigner. 405 points, ended September 5, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
A Kiss by Moonlight and Starlight ♥ by Sunkissed xo. 1000 points, ended October 23, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

What do you think?

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Sunkissed xo
October 21, 2008

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This is a sweet and tender write that, I think, many people can relate to. A heart-rending and gentle aura comes through in your words that moves the heart. Its simplicity really adds to the whole feeling that is created. a sweet write, thanks for entering the contest! best of luck in it!

Love and Light
Chin up,
Katie
strangerforeigner
August 29, 2008

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this reminds me of two teenagers, perhaps even experiencing their first love/kiss. The line "Gods of the kiss" seems a little out of place to me, perhaps because I dont' have the perspective of reading the whole musical? Thanks for entering and good luck!
Jenny84
August 27, 2008
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I like this one. It's pretty passionate. Great write.
EeyoreUK
August 27, 2008

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this sounds like a great love story. Best of luck today and in the future. It all starts with a kiss.
l33t-n1nj4
August 27, 2008
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is this lyrics from the musical or just lines?