Some lovers have hundreds of roses
lining and caressing their garden walls.
Roses are lovely, rare enough in this world.
They smell sweet, their perfumes linger in the mind.
Most roses bloom so elegantly,
but they only open to their lovers so much.
My garden is empty of roses,
but it is no less beautiful for it.
My own garden has a single lilly.
I sit with her all year long;
I wait during winter
for her to bloom in the spring.
When she blooms, she is completely revealed.
She exposes all of her secrets to me.
A rose is less lovely when she opens entirely,
but my lilly is exquisite with her petals open,
every flaw and imperfection under the light of sun.
When my lilly whithers I will plant no roses.
They insult her innocent and fragile beauty.
I would rather my garden be empty
than have one or hundreds of shallow roses
within my scared, guarded walls.
For as long as I live, she will be the only flower
to caress these stones
and grace my garden with her delicate touch.
Author notes
This poem is just something I've been working on in my mind. It's blank verse, obviously, which I haven't done very much with in the past. I'm a female writer, and I'm straight. But this is how I want to be looked at. I want to be seen as beautiful to my boyfriend, even when he has seen the darker parts of me. So, the garden represents the heart, and roses represent girls who are not one's true love or soulmate. The lilly represents a girl who is the soulmate of her boyfriend or husband, the garden keeper. I've never written from the perspective of a man before. It's quite interesting. It actually made this easier to write because I wasn't trying to put a description of love into words, but rather putting how I want someone to feel about me into words. I hope you like it. This is me!
A contest entry
- Who Are You? by AngelOfDarkness88.
350 points, ended September 5, 2008, 59 entries
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"When my lilly whithers I will plant no roses.
They insult her innocent and fragile beauty."
Brillant and no doubt Beautiful this poem captured me. Nice work here love.
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A very deftly done poem, most interesting and even intriguing, and actually, quite different... and I love it a ton!!!
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loved it! Btw, I love your name.
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Beautifully written! Very elegant style....for something you dont work much with, it certainly fits you! Thank you for entering and best of luck...
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Thanks so much for your kind comments. I'm glad you could understand. I wasn't sure it would come across.
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