"This place is horrible. It’s so bad my skin wants to walk away without me." Witch Blood, Anya Bast.
…somewhere less ebony
than the stench of this room.
My shadow scuttles close behind
pale flesh and leaves the door
ajar, lest
mind should find spooks
within the bare chipped walls
and need to escape
through sanity's threshold.
Author notes
Inspired by the quote. "This place is horrible. It’s so bad my skin wants to walk away without me." Witch Blood, Anya Bast.
Image by Heather Perry. Image taken from www.art.co.uk.
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A contest entry
- Novel Quotes by Gypsie Ink.
450 points, ended September 10, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Spooky!
Dramatic and powerful. A spirited write. Thank you for your fresh entry and best of luck in my contest. -
I've read this before...and still like it...but I just noticed you left the "r" out of "Threshold" in the title....ooops
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great write, the title kinda threw me but then I just kept reading and totally glad I did.
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My shadow scuttles close behind
pale flesh and leaves the door
ajar
um WOW.
this imagery is fantastic.
I'll be sure to check out some more of your work..
I loved this. -
I really like the very abstraction of this; the imagery is particularly effective. Appropriate language use throughout, nothing is wasted and that's how it should be! Like the use of figurative devices, particularly personification. Good luck in your contest. Thanks for sharing.
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This is very artsy, girl. You've truly taken the spirit of the quote which inspired you and expanded on it in a way that remained true to the author's intentions. Not only that, but you've chosen interesting, vivid language that keeps the mind engaged. Not too wordy...just enough to get your point across while setting the mood for the reader.
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