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Brewed in Murder

Faith lies strangled in the frozen attics of my mind.
Murdered in style, investigation pending..

"A few more clues and we would know what killed it sir!

though it seems like it was someone close to you.."

The hands of clock are slit.. they would bleed time for a few days more..
A tampered tongue on which a few syllables are left unpronounced..

I wonder whatever happened to "insanity"..
the last time i saw her she was wearing winter with upfolded sleeves..

Strange seasons i got this year.. strange seasons...

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  • ladyhelenaofsorrows
    February 22

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    I really like this, I wanted more at the end of it. I don't know if you meant to leave the "I" in the last line uncapitalized, but in the rest of the piece it was. Thank you for entering, I'm adding yo to the finalists' list.
    -Lena

  • piccola silver member
    November 26, 2008

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    this is vewwwwy interesting and very well written. It left me wanting to hear more, I love a mystery. thank you for entering


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    October 7, 2008

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    Oooh, I love a good mystery. If you find out who/what killed your faith can you let me know? It may be responsible for mine too. Very smart write, I really like it. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Lsh-x
    August 31, 2008

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    Very good! The words are so powerful and you have to read between the lines to truly understand this poem, which is something I do indeed like,

    'The hands of clock are slit.. they would bleed time for a few days more..
    A tampered tongue on which a few syllables are left unpronounced..

    I wonder whatever happened to "insanity"..
    the last time i saw her she was wearing winter with upfolded sleeves.. '

    Great lines, and well done

    Thanks for entering and good luck


  • Captain Jenny
    August 27, 2008
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    Very good. Thanks for entering

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