A saint lives in his present
but dies with his past
[buried secrets] under a rock
is his footstool for preaching.
A saint tries to break
her chains of deceit
but they cut into her skin
and she bleeds pain.
A sinner's mind is
like pandora's box.
if ever opened there will
be an eclipse of disaster.
A saint wears a mask
of peace and morale but
beneath it lies a visage
of an unwanted and unspeakable
past.
I am a saint living
in a sinner's body.
I am a sinner yearning
for a life of sainthood.
I bleed sin but
I heal like a saint.
A contest entry
- Sinner or Saint by Ken-Maverick.
650 points, ended September 22, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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congrat's on your trophy, this is a really great poem. Just a few minor spelling misakes but that doesn't take away from the goodness of your poem. lol. keep writing.
kaycee
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Nice write here my friend
You have followed the prompt well
Thanks for entering this contest
and good luck
Ken -
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thank you
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wowie!!
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Zowie!!! I love this....great write!!
Best wishes in the contest!
Write on!
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with/wiht, deceit/deciet, very minor typos but overall I really liked this. Some great imagery going on here. I thought the use of contradictions was especially effective in communicating the contrasts within us all. The final couplet is especially effective, sums it all up. Great write, thanks for sharing. Good luck in your contest.
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ohhh thank you for correcting my typos i jst noticed them *whoops* im happy you liked this one it took me a while to write xx
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Hello.
An interesting write which does reveal some quite interesting views you have. For instance, to extrapolate from your write; do all saints have such a tumultuous past? Can a saint not have a peaceful past? This view does have shades of "Behold, I have refined thee, but not with silver; I have chosen thee in the furnace of affliction." (Isaiah 48:10, King James Holy Bible).
Your first stanza also has certain tones of eastern thoughts, as well as new age, Gnosticism, etc, for it speaks of living in the now. And the death of ego, before a saint emerges.
It's hard to say if this is a generic view, or a personal view about yourself, but it does show a balanced view on the one hand that we have done things, saintly and sinful. Again there is a strong Abrahamic tone to your write, for it can also read as flesh is sinful, soul is saintly due to your 5th stanza and to a lesser extent your last stanza.
I wish you well in the contest. My regards.
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wow
im speechless u got so much from my poem thank you very very much! xx
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