it wasn't always like this
my hair, my nose,my face
at birth they called me Joleen
i was a completely different kid
my childhood wasn't a nightmare
i had a loving mom and dad
three brothers and a sister
i was the middle sibling child
looking back now i don't remember
the exacted time or reason why
but as my teenage years hit
it was then that it all changed
i fell in with the wrong crowed
pee-pressure got to me
i ran away to become someone
as a model in LA
my looks they had potential
a nip and tuck required
if i wanted to be beautiful
i had to sacrifices
the pain after the surgeries
almost made me quit
but promises of big things
helped to hold me up
after they removed the bandages
unraveled there art work
that's when i became someone
only somebody else
i changed my name 9 times
within the span of just 3 years
had my face splatted across
every magazine's there was
then one day they said again
just your cheek lines now
maybe the lines under your chin
and then its your eye lids
so i did it all again
what harm could it all do
after all it worked the first time
and this time it will work too
i didn't always look like this
once there were no scares
i had a life most dream about
but now i barely live
Author notes
credit : http://chaim-mishaal.deviantart.com/art/Bye-Bye-Beautiful-72888978
A contest entry
- Are You Ready??? It's Time for Another Quickie by Sweet Impatience.
980 points, ended August 29, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Shudder. That just sounds so terrifying, and yet I know so many people do go through with that sort of stuff; so sad when they do it for their careers though, and not for themselves ....
Good job on covering this one =) -
I really loved this poem.. its interesting what happens after making certain decisions in our lives. not always knowing if its wrong or right until perhaps its too late.
excellent take on the prompt and with your poem
I do however have some suggestions to make concerning some typos that I found while reading your poem
I found that you have 14 i that I suggest you capitalize
4th stanza pee = peer
5th stanza sacrifieces = sacrifice
7th stanza 2nd line there = their
other than those typos, your poem is excellent..
good luck in the contest
kat
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Oh wow, what a compelling tale you have told! Just shows how one decision can alter your life. A brilliant write! All the best in the contest
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