Waves peak in crescents of white,
crashing upon barrier dunes.
Salt water beads upon my nakedness,
as I lay stretched upon the sand.
Winds murmur low, sirens temptress call,
alluring ancient mariners to succumb.
A sensual rush as my mind remembers,
once you had lay beside me.
Beads of sweat that poured endlessly,
consumed by summer's passion.
First days of autumn arouse all senses,
how I long for your touch.
How you held me close and whispered,
words of sweet surrender echo.
How the beating sun increased the warmth,
as you filled me with your pleasure.
Upon the beach I ache for you once more,
my longing intensifies.
Like the anicent mariners, I succumb,
pleasure flows as crescent waves peak.
Author notes
Contest Prompt....
your naked beauty reminds me of 'the blooming flower'...Unknown.
In a list
A contest entry
- your naked beauty... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended September 6, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Ah..this is wonderful collection of the immages..and its impact on the hearts of the readers...I love it..well done..
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Very sensual and erotic but taseful and poetic - not at all explicit which is nice. Its one of the best ways to write a poem like this. It flowed together so pleasantly it was a pleasure in itself to read. As always you do an amazing with your poetry
Hope your well!
Jordanne
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Thank You
Good Morning Jordanne, So nice to read your comment. You take care. Hugs and Smiles!!
Bless You,
Sandy
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Heavenly Inspired...
Great poetic beauty!!! This could be a love Psalm in the Bible, it is so divinely gorgeous. Good luck in the contest!!! Peace, Cyn
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Lovely Comment
Thank you Cyn for this lovely comment. Nice to hear from you. Take care, Sandy
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Very sensual, but so tastefully written. A beautiful take on the prompt. I enjoyed the "naked beauty" of this one. Best to you in the contest.
Sam
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Lovely Comment
Thank you a bunch Sam. A lovely comment that is most appreciated. Take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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This is so great!! *rose*
You never leave me without some thought. This is a wonderful write. Best to you. Frans
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Good Morning From Pennsylvania
Hi Frans, Thank you for this very nice comment. Always a delight to have you drop by my friend. Hugsd and Smiles! Take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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excellent
Beads of sweat that poured endlessly,
consumed by summer's passion.
First days of autumn arouse all senses,
how I long for your touch.
How you held me close and whispered,
words of sweet surrender echo.
How the beating sun increased the warmth,
as you filled me with your pleasure.
loved these lines os much.What affectionate nearness you portray. Your mate would be really surprised to find this kind of intimacy in today's world of body parts. well done. thanks for sharing.Kindly do visit my portfolio as well.
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A Beautiful Comment.
Thank you for this lovely comment. I so appreciate your heartfelt words. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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I personally wouldn't think that the memory of laying upon the sand naked would be comforting. I would rather be in the water and perhaps this is where we are drawn...Nonetheless this write takes you to a special place, a special memory....imparts the longing, aching feeling of a lost love.
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Great Comment!
Hello, Thank you for reading and commenting. Take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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great write! flowed very well! the imagery was wonderful and it was very well worded good luck in the contest and keep on penning
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Lovely Comment
Thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate this nice comment. You take care. Sandy
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Excellent
Ah, 'tis a fine romantic write which brings back warm and fuzzy memories. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one.
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Very Nice Comment
Well good morning to you.
So nice to read your comment. I enjoy your thoughts on my poetry. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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You are quite welcome. I hope you have a good day.
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GOOOD
Awesome poem, am speechless. Loved it, the wording is realy good. . . . . . .wow nice work
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Lovely Comment
Thank you so much for reading and leaving this lovely comment. You take care. Sandy
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What a lovely write. The reader is taken into the water as lover waits for the others return. Still wrapped in memories warm and complete. Satisfaction fills the longing that grows as waves peak flow. The intensity grows through each stanza as loves memories glow.
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Lovely Comment
Hello Dan, So glad you enjoyed my poem. Your comments are so thoughtful and appreciated. Always love when you stop by. You always get into the mindset I have written the poem from. You take care. Have a beautiful blessed day dear friend.
Always, Sandy
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BEAUTIFUL SANDY A NICE FLOWING FEEL TO THIS LIKE WAVES I ENJOYED THE READ BEST OF LUCK IN THE CONTEST
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Great Comment
Good morning John. Thank you for reading and leaving this wonderful comment. It is most appreciated. Take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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