Within my garden roses bloom
with thorns of sharpest grief
and thoughts that I'm to meet my doom
hound my spirit like a thief.
It's time to rid my mind of pain
allow the gentle blooms to flourish
and from then on I shall attain
a place where love is nourished.
In a list
A contest entry
- Two Four Line Stanzas - Rhyme and Meter Only by Frodofan.
425 points, ended August 29, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Wonderful
what a terrific use of rhyme. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Ooooooooooooh~
This is a Wonderful rhyming verse~
Woot!
Love the line:
It's time to rid my mind of pain-
can feel the Empowerment~
Excellent!!
Wahooooo~
Keep that quill dancing~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet One
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Not quite consistent meter throughout, but not bad. I liked the brevity and the garden concept. Thanks for entering.
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butiful write mum
xxx judie xxx
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