Melodies whisper haunting notes,
upon the air, they silently float.
Carrying wistful wants and dreams,
glistening bright, under daylight's beams.
Memories weave through satin lace
within the mind vision's grace.
Returning back to yesteryear,
and all the hopes held so dear.
Spiritless echoes begin to break,
blink back and forth as they awake.
Steadily seeping out of isolation,
first steps taken in trepidation.
Cradled, hands of fate now guide,
to where expectation and trust reside.
Restoring faith in broken time,
quelling quandaries of the mind.
Author notes
Option 2
Pic credit:
http://night-fate.deviantart.com/art/i-always-waited-here-for-you-93737948
Well it's not dark....
A contest entry
- Are You Ready??? It's Time for Another Quickie by Sweet Impatience.
980 points, ended August 29, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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once again you have placed me in a state of awe and amazement, you are a golden poet, a treasure of all poetry. keep it flowing and congrads in the contest
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Wow!!! No darkness & its still beautiful...
Loving the imagery here...
And wonderful to see you embrace the light as well as you embrace the darkness...
This'll be that new muse that's come a calling...
Well done!!!
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Beautifully done ~ congrats on your trophy win ~ it was well deserved
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this poem you have written is excellent. I really enjoyed reading it. First of all the title says it all. and as I was reading through your poem I could see the changes.. first it was sad with a sense of loss.. then in the end there was hope, which is a good thing.
the rhyme is flawless and I enjoyed it.. Fantastic job on both the prompt and your poem
good luck in the contest
kat
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lovely write dear.. of emotions well described...
Excellent flow too..
All the best in the contest!
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Not dark but deep and full of sadness
Lost in thought
A beautiful written piece hun
Best wishes to you and good luck
Julie
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this is great! i love your rhyme in this. its just perfect. you have an almost unreal flow thats amazing
all my love
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daylights beams==>daylight's beams
w. an apostrophe...since it's a possessive form.
"visions grace"==>vision's grace
w. an apostrophe
Otherwise...gorgeous.
Good luck
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Thankies Altered
You know one day I may just shock ya and get it right 
It's bound to sink in sooner or later...then again....maybe not 
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I'm sure it will.
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I think this is so beautifully done! Softly aching in it's loss of dreams and trust... but then... at the end, that is so hopefully and full of care!
Lovely write for this picture!!! I looked at it and got nothing, you got something gorgeous indeed hunny!!!
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excellent take on the picture.
Leading the mind from the music of her surroundings, past thoughts and the solace of the future on a positive note.
It is not an erotic poem so wonderful.
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No, none of that from me Thanks for the comment pleased you liked it
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