The moon is face down
in a ditch on the hill
where a farmer stands nailed to a tree
The sun is unstable
it peers through the leaves
and observes as the scarecrows steal wheat
A contest entry
- A Thing Of Beauty Unforgettable by suseann.
900 points, ended August 29, 2008, 9 entries
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The picture you painted for me is excellent,it has a dark feel to it somehow, and the shortness makes it feel quite vulnerable, It kind of instills the eeriness of an autumn night, very well written thanks for sharing littlefishone
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hmm, I like this seasonal observation - it's fitting with old Samhain in sight. I wondered if you'd ever seen the Nicholas Cage remake of the Wicker Man.
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Is this unfinished or just the title?
Cause it could be finished and be quite complete.
Either way I like it much. The coolest of imagery.
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i really like this... great visuals and meter. I especially loved the impact of "farmer stands nailed to a tree" ... best line in it for me :-)
nicely done,
~ wendy -
Interesting take on natural landscapes. This swims on the darkened side in tone.
Inventive composition I enjoyed with an eerie feel brought about in verse.
Best of luck in the comp.
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