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Pompace Venom

Ivory lace slips off
naked shoulders,
baring creamy skin
to moonlight reflections
above

soft to brush -
like cotton candy petals
veiled underneath falling starlets.

Bittersweet poison
drips beads from scarlet fruit
onto crimson lips
and tired granite

as dead cells
scab over chapped brim,

blankets of white
bound her soul to sleep
evermore.


Author notes

http://kittielitter69.deviantart.com/art/Snow-White-16887222

I was absolutely in love with this prompt.

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  • Alyzeh
    September 26, 2008

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    You deserved the trophy!

    I loved it! I didn't want to have a look at the picture because I wanted to know how well you would be able to show me with your words..and by the end of the poem I was very sure about what I was going to find in the picture! Great imagery! Awesome work! I'm a fan


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 6, 2008
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    A picture of a fallen, Gothic Snow White. Lush stuff!


  • Shadow Lynx
    September 1, 2008

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    The first stanza gripped me, i hadnt seen the pic before i read the first time and i thought it was going to be a seductive sensual write, which it started out as beautifully with a superb macabre twist making it a devilishly good poem ! A winner!


  • Tom The Invader
    August 30, 2008
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    So. . . sexy and creepy at the same time! Well done!


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    August 28, 2008

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    I love the take on the prompt hun, I love your superb imagery in this and i just love it, you should do great in the contest
    all my love
    kitty xxx


  • Griswold silver member
    August 27, 2008

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    Excellent take on the prompt, went to the dark side with it for sure. Good job, best of luck to you... Scott

  • kraazk05
    August 27, 2008

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    Excellent take on the prompt. The metaphors in the second stanza were brilliant.

    One minor thing, I'm pretty sure that:
    "bearing creamy skin"
    should read
    "baring creamy skin"

    Good luck, and clappy dudes!


  • Nienna Calmcacil
    August 27, 2008

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    Wow... your poem just captivated me. It seemed to fit that picture absolutely beautifully. Good job... I'm sure you'll do well in that contest.


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    August 27, 2008
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    HER SOUL TO SLEEP EVER MORE THATS LOVELY BEST OF LUCK IN THE CONTEST


  • Lady Michaella
    August 27, 2008

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    beautiful. I love every part of it. Slowely free form writing is consuming me!! lol, but im so bad at it myself. you, however, are amazing at it. great take on the prompt, and thanks so much for entering


    • Salt Therapy
      August 27, 2008
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      thanks so much... it really is easier than you think, just clear your mind, pick a topic and just repeat sentences over in your head, and then change and change again the words in a poetic manner... don't give up on it, i'm sure you are a fine writer no matter what style

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