Unvoiced the hurt haze my heart
And this breakup is way past due
Your egotistical love rips me apart
Unvoiced, the hurt haze my heart
You were wrong for me from the start
I listen how your accusing words accrue
Unvoiced the hurt haze my heart
And this breakup is way past due
Author notes
A Triolet.
- Phrase prompt -
"Past due"
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie! This will be a phrase prompt. by breedluv.
600 points, ended August 27, 2008, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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a good poem, i like the triolet form. ah breaking up, it is sad when such happens, but better to break up than to stay and lie to one another.
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Interesting form, and you pulled it off with style.
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Thank you for my trophy!
This Tiolet was a first attempt for me, and I am very pleased with the result!
I'm so glad you liked it!
Becks
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This is great! It's a true show of strength. Like a rant, you told him off perfectly. As the commenter below me said; the metaphors are wonderful.
Love,
Amera♥
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Love the title and the wonderful metaphors in your write. Great work! Best of luck.
Linda
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