Shadowed.
Innocent veneer chipped away, discarded.
Lead-based,
I
am
poison.
Taste me and know.
You too are
Shadowed.
Author notes
Sheol is another word for hell, often used in the Psalms.
A contest entry
- From Beginning and At the End. by LadyLavender.
900 points, ended August 30, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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Great poem! I love how you gave some words their own line, it added a punch to the words. Kind of creepy, but very good.
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Wow, scary but strong in it content. I like this. Keep writing you're very talented.
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wow love it very stunning miss u lotz nd im glad 2 see ur poetry back again now ill start writing again
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i lved it. i've always liked dark poetry, even tho i'm not the best at writing it. great poem.
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That's creepy, specially these lines:
I
am
poison.
Taste me and know.
You too
are
Shadowed.
Those I sensed some sadness and prisoned feelings. Nice short write, I usually don't like this type of poems but this sounded so...hmmm, special.
Good luck in the contest! -
I really love the words you've used...
Innocent veneer
chipped off,
discarded...
great imagery... Good Luck in the contest!
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