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"That Night"

Static, friction
Your touch makes my nerve endings tingle
How the hell did this happen?
When did things change?
Your fingers gently caressing my knee
Your hand holding mine, guiding it to places below

It was too much
I should have said no
Where’d all my self control go?
At the time it felt so right
But now things will be different because of that night

I know I should pull away
But I don’t, I’m stuck in a trance
You move in slowly
Thinking the same thing as me
Is it worth it?
It must be, because suddenly your lips are on mine

It was too much
I should have said no
Where’d all my self control go?
At the time it all felt so right
But now things will be different because of that night

The kiss starts out sweet, almost questioning
Both of us expecting the other to pull away
Waiting for the other to start thinking straight again
We don’t, I’ve never been one known for thinking straight
Things progress, becoming stronger
Making it harder to pull away

It was too much
I should have said no
Where’d all my self control go?
At the time it all felt so right
But now things or different because of that night

All worries gone
All control diminished
I guess you’ll get what you wanted from the start
I never thought you’d make me feel this way
I never thought we’d be so comfortable with this
I never thought this would happen with you

It was too much
I should have said no
Where’d all my self control go?
At the time it all felt so right
But now things or different because of that night

Caught up in the moment, we are no longer thinking
Then “buzz”
Shit my phone, back to reality
She’s stopped us, without even knowing
Maybe she saved our friendship
But maybe it’s too late

It was too much
I should have said no
Where’d all my self control go?
At the time it all felt so right
But now things will be different because of that night

We’ve stopped
The need is gone
The moment ruined
But we are still sitting to close for people who are “just friends”
Still it’s not awkward


How could I think things would change?
After all, we’re us
We’ve suffered worse
“It’ll only be awkward if you make it awkward”
It’s the truth
So all this meant nothing

Author notes

blondevamp
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  • ChaingangAngel
    November 29, 2008
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    Wow

    The imagery in this write was amazing thanks for entering my contest!


  • chilali
    October 28, 2008

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    I enjoyed reading this. I liked the repetition. Thank you so much for sharing this with me and entering my contest. Good luck


  • Sick Sunshine
    October 18, 2008

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    damn.

    wow, a very different secret from the rest. I loved the meaning of this poem... but secretly... hated the repetitive lines... thank you so much for entering. I can relate in some ways.


  • The Amazon Seer
    August 28, 2008

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    I like it. Somewhat sounds like a song. With the stanzas that repeat. But then again you can always tell it's a poem. And I like the poem. Keep writing.

  • limechic
    August 27, 2008
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    This one hits home...I'm not too much of a fan of the repetition, I found it hindered the flow...but as for the topic, the rest of it...wow. I've been in the same position...that "just friends" seems to be a whole other category.

    Great job, good luck in the contest!

  • HighRise Dusk
    August 27, 2008

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    LMAO!! i started laughing at the "Buzz"! see, Alice told you so. its a good one, i must give you that. i give you credit. its hard to put such an experience into words. so ill give you clappers, cause its that fun to read. lol!

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