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Striking It Rich

If it wasn’t for bad luck, I’d have not a bit
and this was proven to me when my world turned to .
It’s not all that far from the top of the heap
down to the gutter – it’s a small push or leap.
Between lawyers and family and just plain old greed
my wealth quickly departed with amazing speed.
What money remained was soon under duress
and sucked into a black hole called the “I.R.S.”
By the time all the leeches had sucked up my blood,
I was left with five dollars and my dog named “Bud”.

Well, the last of my money just got up and went,
It’s just me and the dog by a stream in a tent.
I invested in K-Mart, I blew the whole roll
on a three dollar and ninety five cent fishing pole.
There’s fish on the fire and Bud at my feet -
with food and a friend, my life is complete.
And it came to me, sitting here by this stream,
you’re extremely rich when you’re living your dream.



Author notes

Prompt: PUT YOURSELF IN THE PLACE OF A PERSON who is ornery enough to be considered old, been through a lot of crap in your day, "yadda yadda...lost my house, my car, my dog and "my wife ran off with a Willis Shaw driver, yadda..." whatever, but you have been down before, but things are thin. You've become unable to pay you bills, your basically a trustworthy good hearted soul, and there’s nothing you can do about it; you’re going to lose the roof over your head, you’ll have to find a place and a way to take everything you own wherever you’re going to store it, In other words, life is sucking the chrome off your toaster and making chromeless homeless bumper stickers, saying, "Love your toast".
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  • dustookie2
    September 5, 2008

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    Oh nice Sometimes there is much truth said in the jest of humour. A great take on the prompt I enjoyed where you took this one. Good luck in the contest.


  • Roaddog Wolf
    September 4, 2008

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    yep sometimes not having much to worry about

    can be a blessing in disguise, the simple things in life, good write


    thanks for entering the contest and good luck
    ...


  • tarcus
    September 3, 2008

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    A thoughtful end for you and a friend
    lets hope one day those bridges will mend.
    But while you sit and meditate;
    remember good things come to those who wait

  • thinking ape
    August 28, 2008

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    Bill used to sing a Bob Zentz song called "Dial-a-Prayer". Only in the song his dog was dead. Bill was a roamer, and had no dog. Then he died.

    Also makes me think of MOM, out on her own in something like wilderness, and envious of her freedom. She's got herself, and a rolling home, the wild animals and she have some communal thing going; I don't doubt the fish ask her to eat them if she would.
    Good poem. Must hunt up old tapes.


  • HopelessScribbles gold member
    August 27, 2008

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    when one can come up with a winner like this, i think you got a veryyy good sense of humor, thank you for sharing, good luck in his contest
    Linda


  • playjazz67
    August 27, 2008

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    Hey, you have followed me around and written my life -- (well I did buy a little better fishin' pole). This looks like a Gold Medal winner to me

    Jim


  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    August 27, 2008

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    An ispiring write Ken, brilliantly quilled. How oft we forget it is the simple things that are the real treasures in life.

    Jem


  • Lucy.
    August 27, 2008

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    LOVE IT!! Honestly...what a beautiful tale, told so well. Best of luck in this contest!

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