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Look at me, Not through me




Skin is worn down and brittle
like a book that's read often

Even though I've been touched
I don't feel tainted at all

You're face haunts me in dreams
so now I know what I am looking for

I wish to shed my old self
be new for your hands to caress

I am not ashamed
not of my life
but for you
a hunger to be new

 

 

 

 

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Option 5:
http://chaim-mishaal.deviantart.com/art/Bye-Bye-Beautiful-72888978

Hope you like love!


1/25/09
New notes for mirror contest: I don't know if you'll like this, but here it is anyway.

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  • Ignis Corpus
    February 12

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    Alright so I'm guessing a mirror of how one looks upon themselfs, correct? For it's good. Also, I'm really liking the lines "For I have been touched,/ but I don't feel tainted at all." I'm not sure why but those just pop out in my head. It's a really good poem over all. I'm just a little confused thought, is it talking about rape or a fixation on someone? I wish you the best of luck in this contest.

    Ignis Corpus


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 29, 2008

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    this is outstanding.. I really love this one a lot. WOW!! really strong and the imagery is amazing. I love the last two stanzas especially the last line..

    excellent take on the prompt. Fantastic job on your poem

    good luck

    kat


  • LadyDementia gold member
    August 27, 2008

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    Wow, love this! The last line really rocks! Brilliant take, good luck


  • fairytalelovestory
    August 27, 2008
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    this is a really beautiful take on the prompt good luck to you


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 26, 2008
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    the prompts are up when you get back

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