Image credit: River in Snow
Employing passing leaves, time will engage,
engrossed in words that trade leaflets of plight,
betrothing river's bend on season's page.
It's winter's call that filters summer's stage
with masquerade in trickery of sight
employing passing leaves time will engage.
Absorbing colors catered in her rage
with fury's finger grasping icy light
betrothing river's bend on season's page.
Within each varlet's curled and twisted cage
life captures with this incoherent blight
employing passing leaves, time will engage.
And deeply rooted affiance shall gauge
approximations summoning her right;
betrothing river's bend on season's page.
As leaflet white in blanketed assuage
appeases gentle care and shifting might
employing passing leaves time will engage,
betrothing river's bend on season's page.
In a list
A contest entry
- Villanelle with Meaning by Peteskid.
2250 points, ended September 3, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I absolutely loved reading this villanelle.
Congratulations on the gold, Pamela! This is the form I am trying reading about right now. I love the repeated lines in this form. I adds even more vitality to the images you created. Your verbiage is so carefully chosen here.
betrothing river's bend on season's page.
This is quite an image to finish up this poem!!
Don
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Thank you Don. This was one of the first forms I ever tried writing after falling in love with the ultimate Villanelle, "Do Not Go Gentle into that Good Night" by Dylan Thomas.
I am pleased you are studying this form and I know you will do it justice.
So pleased you enjoyed this one. I thank you kindly for such a lovely comment. Your words are so appreciated.
~Pamela 
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I started to write a villanelle yesterday, but it ended up turning into another Shakespearean sonnet.
I've written three of those after the first attempt, and I'm starting to get a handle on that form. I'm not sure about how I'm doing with the iambic pentameter, though. That's a work in progress, I think. You inspire me so much with your love for form. I'm just glad to be moving away from just free verse and short forms, as much as I love writing them. I write in so many different genres, everything from dark, humor, and light poetry. It's nice to expand my own horizons with my writing. I didn't know a thing about writing poetry when I first joined AP 2 and a half years ago, so I really have you to thank the most for encouraging me to write more form. I'm not afraid to attempt it anymore. That's a good thing.
By the way, I hope your knee is doing better.
Don
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Veritably
a Winklings contest. So glad to be with friends especially a co-leader who gets the GOLD Gong!
Beautiful nature villanelle.
The archaisms are a delight, consistently presenting Winter's call in medieval terms: plight; betrothing; masquerade; varlet; blight; affiance; assuage.
Words on the page; tricks on the stage ~ wonderful metaphors touching on personification.
And, you followed, artistically, the specifications so well.
Congratulations. 
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Ron
Thank you so much for your kind words on this piece. I labored so over this one and was shocked to see it win. Thank you again. ~Pamela 
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Excellent Villanelle. I think this is one of the hardest form poems to do and you have mastered it extremely well. Excellent meaning brought to the front. Thanks for sharing and congrats on the gold.
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ckwriter69
Thank you so much for taking a moment to read and to leave your wonderful comments. I appreciate them so much. ~Pamela
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nicely penned . . good picture . . liked "engrossed in words that trade leaflets of plight" and "betrothing river's bend on season's page" . . good word choices . . congrats on the gold
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carole21
Than you so much for your kind words and wonderful comment. I appreciate it so much. ~Pamela
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Congratulations, Pamela. This was such a beautiful villanelle. PK was so right about the way you defined your first lines-so completely eloquent. Just a lovely entry with depth and beauty.
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ten
Thank you so much. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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You have the form of Villanelle/Definition well done here! Your definitions are so good, and the refrains worked very well on every stanza.
A very pleasant read
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MariGoes
Thank you ever so much for your kind words of praise. Coming from you, this means the world. THANK YOU SO MUCH. What an amazing concept with Villanelle. ~Pamela
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Congratulations with the so well deserved gold!
And you are very welcome, it was a pleasure reading your poem
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Aahh..a Villanelle. Dang this is good and each time and each time I read your form poetry it just inspires me to write! Excellent write as always. Good luck in the contest..take care.
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meena krish
It is always a pleasure to see your kind words on my poetry. Thank you so much for taking a moment to read and comment. ~Pamela
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This is utterly amazing hon, one of my favorites of yours, and one of my favorite villanelles that I've read here.
This is publishably good.
Kathleen
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Kathleen
You are too too kind with your praise. Thank you so much. This was such a challenging contest. I am so pleased you enjoyed this. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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see, I wasn't being kind, I was right. Gosh, I love it when I'm right, lol.
Congratulations Pamela.
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ooh this has meaning so rich with the beauty winter brings. And the right it brings is coming soon.
a beautiful worded villanelle.
Wonderful work truly you are blessed with words
Love and LIght
tEarz
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tEarz
Thank you so much my friend. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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There is a gentle blending of light and feeling
to this verse. Words that traverse the obvious
sensations of season to offer something a bit
more clandestine. Your vocabulary as usual is
right on target and even furthers the given
prompt to vary this difficult form. Blue
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Blue
My friend, thank you so much for your kind comment and words of praise. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one. ~Pamela
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a beautiful meandering - I love that word, "varlet"! I don't know it.
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ea
Thank you so much. I am so pleased for your comment on this poem. ~Pamela
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I think this is simply beautiful. A lovely lyrical villanelle form. The definitions reach me easily and add the logical resonance that this form can give, to say a word and then amplify or extend it, so very well done here with figuration, poetic expression, and such delightful creativity. I especially liked the 'masquerade'. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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PK
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment and the honor of gold in your contest. This was a challenge beyond measure for me and I loved every frustrating moment. Thank you again. A truly rewarding experience. ~Pamela
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Well, I recommend adding this to your repertoire, because it was an exceptional poem, you should be proud of this especially because it was a first attempt at a difficult form...Congratulations... I was pleased to see it was your poem next to the Gold Cup...PK
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