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distance.kills.

she waited for him
to call and
//./.TAKE.x.IT.x.BACK.//./
she fell asleep
with the phone in her hand.

the victim of distance
too close to be so far away
a phone call was just too much

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Written January 17th, 2004

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  • PseudoJuliet
    March 24, 2005
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    this was emotional and simple i liked it

  • PoetryGirl26
    January 17, 2004
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    I liked this, it made you think and just brought up all the pain in this girls heart in few few lines...well done! I liked this alot...no rhyme or rythum needed...just the simple stated lines made it so powerful!


  • babigurlie136
    January 17, 2004
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    wow iknow exactly what ur saying!! love it!