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Life-Giving Earth Mother

      my mind wanders

      back in time

      to a million dreams ago

      a different time and place

      when breezes whipped

      down from the mountain

      with a wet-dirt smell

 

      the sun struck our faces

      with a strong, hot hand
      opening a crater of need

      within the center of our souls

      the need to rise

      to meet that life-giving sun

      to wallow in its warmth

      attempting to suck it all into

      this empty sack we call skin


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  • wishintreeUK
    September 15, 2008

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    I love this! "a wet dirt smell" the smell of deep littered leaves scattered abundantly... each tread releasing the pungent aroma, filling the senses with nature in the raw.
    "a crater of need" the imagery in this poem is so very, very strong... I can feel myself "wallowing in the sun's warmth" I love the term you have used here... "this empty sack we call skin"

    A brilliant piece of work, one I wouldn't have missed for the world.

    Well done, Katie


  • Swan song gold member
    September 3, 2008

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    Truly excellent!!! congrats on the gold.I love the flavor of this poem jsut kind of a smooth and easy flow Well done

  • Lost Luggage
    September 2, 2008

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    WOOHOO for GOLD!!!

    Congratulations again! Your title is reminiscent of t h i s piece I wrote during one of your absences (I think.) Anyway, living in Northern Michigan, you have no idea how much I look forward to: "wallow[ing] in its warmth, attempting to suck it all into, this empty sack [I] call skin[!]"

    Some of your earlier poems seemed distant, perhaps detached from my locus of thinking. These last three I've read feel very close and familial. Anything changing in your life right now or am I just imagining things?!

    Loved it!


  • suseann
    August 27, 2008
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    This dives into the metaphysical aspects of natures effects upon humankind deeply.
    Going to the heart of combining spiritual longings felt and our solar sustaining center of conceptions.
    A reader feels the higher self exuberate. I enjoyed this. Thank you and good luck in the comp.


  • Midnight Lace
    August 26, 2008
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    Simply divine reading. Good luck in the contest.
    ~Midnight Lace


  • TXCowgirl
    August 26, 2008

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    You have captured and exposed some beautiful imagery to tease the senses here. I like your style. The words and thoughts just seem to roll so freely across the page without any inhibition at all. Go for the Gold Touch!!
    TxCowgirl


  • TheRealDeal
    August 26, 2008
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    I admire the flow and thoughts projected here. I think this paints a realistic picture of two souls enjoying the great outdoors, absorbing life from that hugs ball of heat that hangs above and allowing it to soak into the flesh and warm them through and through. Good luck in your contest.
    JLG


  • Rclane gold member
    August 26, 2008
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    Very well penned this excellent take on prompt. Luck to you in contest.


  • heartnsoul
    August 26, 2008

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    Even without the picture you've painted a beautiful picture. I don't know that I would say my skin is an empty sack though. LOL I haven't gotten that old ... yet. LOL
    Superb poetry thank you for sharing
    Michelle


  • LionessK silver member
    August 26, 2008
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    loverly.

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