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The Big Fall

The rich can see the end coming, they try to just prolong it
We will all fall and succumb to greed
Money is our hearts desire, give into the devils plan

Flames surround us as we try to escape this hell we have brought upon ourselves

We're just feeding the fire to end our damned world quicker

You maybe famous but your gonna die soon, the big fall awaits

 

When your scared you call out to your mama who just now shuns you

Thrown away like a piece of trash we all meet the big fall

If we fight through it all we will come back from the ashes to fall again

 

We all live in a world bent on total damnation and soon to be engulfed by fire

 

We will all fall and be tossed away like the trash we are

We will all have a big fall, rich or poor, you cannot escape

Author notes

"We're damned after all,
Through fortune and flame we fall.
And if you can say then I'll show you the way to return from the ashes you call... " Mama - My Chemical Romance
Be yourself, don't take any-ones shit and Never Let Them Take You Alive

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  • alexandra.
    November 12, 2008

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    Nice.

    Technically, it good.
    It's very, very good.

    However, it doesn't seem to flow right.
    In some parts.


    The third stanza and the line after are without a doubt, the strongest.

    [oh, punctuation, it's not a lost art, use it]

    goodluck.
    x.


  • xXBrutalRomanceXx
    September 28, 2008

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    hmmm. this is pretty good. i could deffinately tell it was inspired by MAMA. good luck, and thanx 4 ur entry!


  • Xmas16
    September 23, 2008

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    another impressive write. A good take on the prompt and an amazing way of looking at the song. Nice job


  • Luckintheshadows
    August 29, 2008

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    An impressive take on the prompt! I'm glad you chose that one because it's currently my most favourite song Your poem flows well, it's intense and alive with some fantastic imagery!
    Thank you so much for sharing this, and taking the time to enter my contest,

    Luck.


  • Mistress Masquerade
    August 27, 2008

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    I like the twist you took on the song Mama, its great and stays with the theme of the song but puts your ideas and feelings first. Best of luck in that contest.

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