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the Coice

sometimes i look at the fiery hell hole that is my life
and wonder what did i do to deserve this
and after hours of pouring over my life i realize that i can't change it
so as i walk down the long path which is life i come to a fork in the road
i know were both paths lead to the left is death quick but painful
and to the left is life which i carry on living and i will never know what happens next
so i sit by a rock and think about which one I'm going to chose and then it hits me and i think I'm tired of living and arguing with my mum and my girlfriend so i suddenly jump up and i take the path to the left and after a few hours of walking down the path i am greeted by the devil who puts a shiny long knife in to my hands and whispers you know what to do and then i nod and say yes
so i put the knife to my neck and pull it left to right and watch my blood spray to the floor and all coluors fade to black but when the pain fades away i see my mum and my girlfriend standing there i get up and i feel my neck were i slit and it is gone so i walk to my mum and my girlfriend and say I'm sorry then everything fades and i am left on my own

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  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    August 30, 2008
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    We all feel like life sucks and is leading us nowhere but into more pain and sadness. Most have probably even wondered if anyone would even notice if we weren't around anymore. I think this speaks to that. It is a chilling and dark ride you take your reader on. Punctuation and caps would help the flow. Thanks for entering and good luck.