Beauty, grace empowered
Heart rotten to the core, slowly devoured
Make-up mask plastered to her face
Heart starts beating, beginning to race
Stride quickens as she walks down the hall
Hoping no one will notice her fall
Tarnished heart and broken wings
Covers it up with shiny things
Heart is bleeding, constantly racing
Feet can't seem to stop their pacing
Running away from society's eyes
Afraid to show all of her lies
Duct tape heart, barbed wire feelings
Slowly now the skin starts peeling
Afraid of failing, given up
No longer drinking from Destiny's cup
So lost inside too often lied
Tear fall, inside crimsonly cried
Doesn't want to be judged; her life is a lie
Blood drips from the knife, new scar that says die
Life's a journey, she's a ship lost at sea
Never knowing who she's going to be
Mask becoming her true face
Sugar-coated cotton stringed with lace
Author notes
I don't remember when exactly I wrote this one either, also one of my favorites
A contest entry
- Stop Telling Me About Reality and Let Me Pretend by DarknessOfSanity.
750 points, ended September 9, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"Blood drips from the knife, new scar that says die"
love that bit!!!!!!!!!!GREAT POEM!!! keep it up..!
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KUDOS!
Oh my god! I absolutely loved this poem so much! It's amazingly written and you make it uber easy to relate to. I loved the detail, and the imagery, and the emotion you put into this was just absolutely fantabulous! I just loved this piece!
"Duct tape heart, barbed wire feelings
Slowly now the skin starts peeling
Afraid of failing, given up
No longer drinking from Destiny's cup
So lost inside too often lied
Tear fall, inside crimsonly cried
Doesn't want to be judged; her life is a lie
Blood drips from the knife, new scar that says die"
Those two stanzas screamed at me! They were so detailed, and you made it so easy to relate to her through these stanzas. I loved your poem and thought it was so so /so/ good! Thanks so much for entering it! Good luck! -
Gave me Chills!
I could so relate! The feelings and images that you portray here are stunning; with such rhythm and rhyme!
"Heart rotten to the core, slowly devoured
Make-up mask plastered to her face"
"Tarnished heart and broken wings
Covers it up with shiny things"
"Heart is bleeding, constantly racing
Feet can't seem to stop their pacing
Running away from society's eyes
Afraid to show all of her lies"
All of it; just amazing stuff! You are really in touch with things that took me years to realize when I was your age. You describe much of the feelings I went through when I was 14/15, but I chose to be in denial and cover it all up with "shiny things". Wow, incredible write. You should enter it in a contest.
You may want to read my "Hollow Tree". It describes similar things that you say here - although maybe for different reasons and maybe not. I hope that your life is not really like this. What you describe here is just so raw and real. My heart goes out to you!
karen
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