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Questions

Would you seek me, were I lost:
If my heart were tempest-tossed
Would you calm me with a smile
Would you grant me rest a while?

Would you stay with me till death:
Till my final, tortured breath
Would you wipe away my tears
Would you calm my doubts and fears?

If I asked you, would you stay:
Close beside me all the way
Through this life of trial and task
Would you answer, dare I ask?

Could you care for me a pace:
Would you grant me gentle grace
Should I wait for your reply
Here I stand: will you pass by?

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  • HeartTangles
    October 19, 2008

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    Yes, I would since you asked so nicely!!! Love the flow and rhyme and the total meaning behind this beautiful woven piece. Should have been gold not bronze.


  • Isi
    October 17, 2008
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    Applause


  • Isi
    October 13, 2008

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    I could never just pass by

    I would never walk away
    you're a friend and I will stay
    I would care for you throughout
    all your heartache and your doubt

    Just as long as you will find
    on your own some peace of mind
    on my shoulder; worries pour
    that my friend's what friends are for

    It's been a while since I last was in here, and mye first actions after updating my profile and adding some of my own is always to see what you've been up to, your poetry is always refreshing and enjoyable

    *hugs*

  • ea silver member
    August 28, 2008
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    I like this, very tender and palpable.


  • widesummer
    August 27, 2008

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    brilliant

    This poem is well written with a good flow and it keeps you interested all the way through it.....well done.


  • no win no fee
    August 27, 2008
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    I think... yes! xx

  • Bad Bill
    August 26, 2008

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    I like this very much, my friend. There's a great sense of human need and vulnerability in this well-crafted poem. Excellent work.

    Bill


  • MargaretG
    August 26, 2008

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    I like this

    "Will you still need me, will you still feed me"?
    These are wonderful questions of commitment, very human and vulnerable. It gives me doubt that the other person is willing.


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    August 26, 2008

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    ohhh this is a wonderful poem! I can't find any flaw - I like what you did with this, thanks for entering and best of luck!!

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