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cobwebs






cobwebs
in the sunflowers
harvest mist






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  • Draig aine gold member
    September 30
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    stunning

    what a great ah ha and it just plane works


  • yukitosumi
    February 28

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    Very well-formed haiku! It was concise, provided a detailed (but not too-detailed!) Image. It placed me right in a September morning, enjoying a garden, maybe sipping some tea.
    Loved it!
    Best,
    El


  • Sandal
    August 29, 2008

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    These words are richly evocative. The end of summer is very clear, and the time seems to be early morning. The form seems to make the webs and mist equivalent.


  • myron silver member
    August 28, 2008

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    structured

    I love the way this haiku has been structured with the flowers in the middle surrounded by cobwebs and mist. The pivotal central line makes it all hang together well. I can just see those huge sunflower faces shining out and bringing joy to all who care to look.

    Nicely done,
    Myron.