I thought I had grown
Until my childhood just began….
with you.
in this eccentricity of adulthood
we find the profundity of bliss
painting a house with no doors
and shading it in hues of orange and green
madness, madness, utter madness!!!
just as the world around us.
we spend hours in a toy store, wandering,
if not playing and buying,
oblivious of the world... around us.
Your delight is the same
and I long for such replays,
giving you compliments with no reason,
so I can see you smile.
You’ve taken me back to 30 years or more
To that little boy who jumped over hedges
ate ice candy and lollipops,
watched the sunset
admired the nature,
mixed ketchup with everything
played snake and ladder and silly quizzes
watched nothing but cartoons,
didn’t know about anger
didn’t mind to apologize
and shared everything that was his…
Author notes
I hope this meets the criteria... thanks!
A contest entry
- Happily Embracing Your Inner Child by Mackay.
600 points, ended August 28, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I really liked this one Lencio! Well done. Congrats on the Bronze
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Bravo
Should have been a gold for we all still have thwe child within and for those who didnt have a loving childhood that child can still learn the joys of life through love and being loved by another .Great piece here
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good write
i like the way you describe your childhood.some times a poem is a trip which we take to depart from here to an unknown place.
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Lovely write, especially enjoyed;
"giving you compliments with no reason,
so I can see you smile."
That was just really sweet, you could imagine a child saying it / doing it, just to get the reward of a sunshine lit smile in return.
Congrats on the trophy
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Superb
Ah, a very nice write with which I could relate. As usual you expressed yourself very well, indeed. Again, well done. -
This poem is beautiful.
I feel like my vocabulary range is inadequate from reading your work
Thank you sincerely for your very nice comments on my writing.
Oh, I was actually eating a lollipop while i read this so i laughed when i read line 19
Well done.
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There's no surer way to become unhappy than to stop seeing the world with a child's eyes. How great it is to find someone you feel safe enough with to be childlike again. You captured that joy well.
Hope you're doing well these days, old friend.
Mark
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Wonderful!
Dear Lencio,
What a joy to read this poem.
The delight of a child!
I love the boy who mixed ketchup with everything...
Recently, I lay on my back in the garden with a friend
and we looked up at the sky through the trees...
We all need to keep in touch with child-like wonder!
Bravo! Jane
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Its a beautiful poem, buddy! Nice images and good word choice. All the best in the contest.
Charishma
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what a wonderful slant..
on the prompt.
Thank you so much for the entry. -
Superb
Ah, brought back fond memories of my own childhood. You expressed yourself quite well in this write. Thanks for sharing.
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