Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Vampyre Angst

For a Vampyre the balance isn't always there
on the outside we never age or worry about hair
but in private we reach out in quiet, lost despair

We fly through the night and seem so very sane
fearless of the dangers no demons can contain
but in private we yearn for a solution to our pain

When the world is in transition, we reveal no real ommision
to interfere with mortal lives would be an imposition
but deep down we wish for challenge offering decision

Immortality knows no peace

Author notes

8. Vampires yearn for zen.

In a list

A contest entry

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 8 of 8

  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 20, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Great write, they have to have a torturous existence. Love that last line. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Riftkin gold member
    September 1, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This is great, thank you for entering my contest.
    Many more poems are left in your quill I hope.

    Riftkin


  • maralisa silver member
    August 29, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    a brilliant poem full of some strong powerful emotions I realy loved stanza two it says so much good luck in the contest


  • Midniterose
    August 27, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Awesome! I like it. You're introducing the other side of immortality, which is nice rather than your cliche forever and accomplishments. I really like the way you have formated the poem into three stanzas of three lines with the one line close. It isn't traditional which adds to the poem. Great write! And by the way...Have you read the Twilight series? If not I highly recommend it.

  • Hovels 2
    August 26, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Woah, deep.


  • Luckintheshadows
    August 26, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    ooooh my! This is fantastic, as always your words are full of emotion, and your lines flow beautifully. I especially love this:
    "but in private we reach out in quiet, lost despair"
    ^fantastic!
    Thanks for sharing this and all the best in the contest,

    Luck.

  • Judith Chandler
    August 26, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Like the way you have expressed this. It's a comment on what it's like to be different. Immortality cannot be an easy life. It would be difficult to form friendships, I think, especially when the person who wish to befriend fears ending up with a bit on the neck!

1 - 8 of 8