condensation trickles
down cracked glass
separating her reflection
into fragments
exposing the way she feels
~ ~ ~ ~
damaged, but in one piece
Author notes
Prompt: "I tear my heart open, I sew myself shut. My weakness is that I care too much." - Papa Roach
20 Words in 60 Minutes
A contest entry
- Morning Quickie 10-20-30 by markgrif.
475 points, ended August 26, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this is great...i really like the meaning in this and the imagery it creates for me of a broken glass with water trickling down and the way a reflection would appear in that, mirroring their inner feelings! great work.
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My
We do, at times, stand in terrible judgement of ourselves. Often breaking up into small pieces.
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This is beautiful Kimberly. The picture scares me a bit though.. this is true...I think this describes me almost to a T.
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Congrats on Silver!
With eyes like that, who cares about a bad hair day?! I think that lady taught seventh grade English in my hometown! Again, conrats on the silver trophy!
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Great take on the prompt of emotionally worn. Yet exudes resolve and a sense of duty.
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Outer joins inner
in the crux of the feel
Yin joining yang
as they seal the real deal
Hugs...Eddy
A perfect picture painted there and very creative
I must confess...
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Great
Wow, very powerful to say the least. A lot of emotion and intense writing. Good job!
Dena
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I hope you know how awesome you are! This is just incredible. So much feeling in just 20 words. Yay for the silver!
~Midnight Lace
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Touch'e Touch. You have nailed this one perfectly to the wall. Or should I say mirror?
Glad to see this bit of poetry took the silver dear.
TXCowgirl
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What a powerful in-your-face scene you have given us here. The emotional and physical heartbreak is proclaimed with a great voice. Great choice of words.
JLG
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Well won Silver
Empathy; marriage of impression of the visible with character inspires me. Congratulations.
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I like it.
Good pic to go with it. -
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Sorry it took me so long to get back to you. Thank you for the nice comment.
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