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I Care, Therefore I Bleed






beating out
a rhythm of pain

in staccato
needle point touches

flinching
wondering

will this weakness ever
become my strength?

 

 

 

 

 

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20 words


Prompt:

"I tear my heart open, I sew myself shut.
My weakness is that I care too much." -  Papa Roach

 

 

 

 

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 31, 2008

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    Damn.. I can so relate to this also!!!!! A magnificent take on the prompt and so deserving of Gold Margaret!!


  • Shadow Lynx
    August 30, 2008

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    Wonderful intense metaphor, what a terrific take on the prompt, a well deserved gold!!

  • Bel Ange silver member
    August 28, 2008

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    a weaknes like thet never becomes our strength, because time after time we repeat the same proceedure over an over again. such is the curse of being so empathetic and those who care teh deepest also bleed teh most.
    there are some boo boo's that a bandaid just won't cover and a needle and thread can't even fix.

    congrats on teh gold

    jan ♥


    • Margaret Denham gold member
      August 28, 2008
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      Honey, you know more than anyone how much I've bled and you've always been the one who applied the bandaid and helped me through it as I've always tried to do for you

      Thank you for your beautiful comment and your understanding

      Love always

      Margaret

      • Bel Ange silver member
        August 28, 2008
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        hun, we ran out of bandaids a lon, lon time ago. moved on to bandages now

        jan ♥


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    August 26, 2008

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    I think we share the same affliction dear. Congrats on the gold.


    With much love,
    mj.

    • Margaret Denham gold member
      August 27, 2008
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      I wonder if it is actually an affliction. Caring is something that comes naturally to some

      Thank you for your comment dear, it made me think almost as much as the prompt did

      Always
      Margaret


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    August 26, 2008
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    You earned this.

    Good morning.


  • Puppydog gold member
    August 26, 2008

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    BEAUTIFUL!!!!

    The old saying is so true, only the ones who dare to show they care are hurt. Very beautiful poem! 's


  • unmasked synergy
    August 26, 2008
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    wonderful!


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    August 26, 2008
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    bravo!


  • Anguas-Confusion gold member
    August 26, 2008

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    Wow mummy this is amazing! You really have improved from when I first met you... the hidden meanings and truths in your poems are amazing... the metaphors are more intense! Well done mummy!! best of luck in the contest

    love you xxxxxx

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