mystical moments
love letter eyes lock like lamps
beneath bated breath
softly, so slightly
feeling flirting fingertips
silently signal
pounding pulsations
chests contract concordantly
blending briny beads
Author notes
Amera - Amaranthine Lover
In a list
A contest entry
- Sensual Haiku by Dalaney.
1050 points, ended August 26, 2008, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Highly sensual, but tastfully composed, I love the dramatic imagery, it lets the mind delve deeper giving more of an accurate wiff or essence of the intended immage, yet the sensations as well. Beautifully and most masterfully composed!
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Oh My~
You make this look so easy~ I have yet to do a Senryu-
but after reading this- feel Inspired to make an attempt
Another Excellent verse Form Queen!
Love the words: flirting fingertips~
Woot!
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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You're driving me kRaZy, Sis!
hoppitty hoppitty hoppitty
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Why? Your poem beat mine
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Oh that's got nothing to do with it!
It's just that your poem gave me a lovely fit of the giggles.
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Beautiful, sensual, Yessa!!
congrats on the well desrerved trophy.
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Yipeee!!!!!! Alliteration!!!
And how brilliantly you have done it my dear!!
Very sensual imagery and done with such CLASS!!!
Love love love it!!!
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I should thank you. It's your work that inspired this
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Aww
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I love the aliteration of the lines, and so surprised this only got a bronze, it is beautiful and full of captivating imagery as you have worked in the confines of berivety. Beautiful, passionette {?please excuse me, if I have misspelled this} and captivating poem.
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Gorgeous Senryu here. I absolutely loved it!
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Well done, bunnies for you as well.
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well done here
loved it.
Love you
Tory
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nothing short of superb
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Wow! I told you I would come back and review your edits and am I ever glad I did. This is fantastic. You have shown your worth as a freeverse writer for sure. This is exceptional, and I love it, so I am going to give you six bunnies!
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Really good. I've just started into the haiku and I really think it's one I can get into with no rhyme. I have three at the moment and am taking the begginer class. Thanks for sharing. UNT
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alliterative
amera arousingly
attracts us all
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Well done. It keeps the procession of intermingling of spirits graduating into a final synopsis. I like the way you cleverly use the words to build the feeling.
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This touched me in a very personal way. There is no higher praise for a haiky/senryu in my mind. You captured the feeling in broad short brushstrokes, but in ever so tender and subtle language. Delicious.
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Hot stuff and aimed pretty well in the right direction I'd say
the queen of all forms
writes haiku for dalaney
and makes them so hot
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wow.
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