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rattle




"The poetry of earth is never dead"
— John Keats




The sun rattles.
An old tin can, rusted
bent

red/yellow/orange— leaves flip and twist
as the wind strolls by;
greetings of long friends, comrades.
Scent of summerfresh lingers
just a bit
before scurrying off to the coast
to mix with salt water crests.

Adam cocks his head, listens.
Cardinal sits on a branch
chirps to him
explains the world's turning slightly.
Keats on the bench
flat spined; he speaks the language.
I laugh as Adam's eyebrow lifts

cardinal chirps, joins in with the wind.
Leaves flutter

and the sun rattles.
An old tin can, rusted
bent.





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  • Victory Gin silver member
    October 31, 2008

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    I love Keats. Nice poem. I have come to love the disjointed and surreal quality of your writing.


  • Heart Sutra
    September 15, 2008
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    Great poem!

    Good luck in the contest.


  • onerios13
    September 11, 2008

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    Adam cocks his head, listens.
    Cardinal sits on a branch
    chirps to him
    explains the world's turning slightly.

    This was coated in surreal beauty, the playful yet poignant display deeply touching with its brilliant imagery. This is what poetry should be and others would do well to heed its example.

    Gorgeous.

  • Suzanne Dia
    September 10, 2008

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    I like this
    because I am reminded of how I try to find poetry everywhere; and because you have done it with such skill. I will likely not look at the sun quite the same again

    This was a warm smile to find waiting today
    it has been too long since I have read you.


  • poetryality silver member
    September 2, 2008

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    I've missed your talent and skill. This is brilliant. The best to you in the contest.

    Renee


  • MessedupMarionette
    August 28, 2008

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    I really like this! I especially like the lines "Cardinal sits on a bench/chirps to him/explains the world's turning slightly." It's so serene--it just feels like it embodies autumn perfectly.


  • sailor ptolema
    August 28, 2008

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    This is just plain great. I can hear the tin can rattle .

    Sailor Ptolema

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  • misselaineous
    August 26, 2008
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    just happy to read your words
    fine words...

  • Rowan gold member
    August 26, 2008

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    So good to see your brilliance again.
    Not blah, tsk, tsk.


  • poet2angels gold member
    August 26, 2008

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    I love this...


    You are brilliant, but I already knew that years ago...

    Lynda

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