pain consuming me...
the need to cut and cut
everyday the pain grows..
everyday the pain shows
the pain is rising
through my body as the
knife slashes ..
it burns with pain
but I won't cry I deserve
this pain and i won't lie.....
the pain it makes me weak
the help I try to seek
nothing goes right
its a constant fight..
the pain hurts
I'm at breaking point
lying on the floor I
cut and cut
the pain has overtook me
and now I am no more
because of all my blood on the floor
Author notes
Broken - gurl
Option 1: Write about what type of pain you have inside of you, whether it be physically, mentally, emotionally, whatever type.
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Comments
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Yet another great write. I know one thing for sure. You have my full attention. You are a very good writer. I know writing makes me feel better for a little while.
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I like your poem but you have entered it in many contests, and i would like to offer a trophie to none trophie winners.
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this poem is excellent. I can feel the pain you have deep inside. it's sad to read but it's a great poem. good luck in the contest.
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*shudder* the end of this poem is haunting, what a great write, i like that you wrote in first person point of view, best of luck in the contest
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Please don’t cut! Don’t cut!
I don’t want you to do that … you’re 12 there’s lot you must learn… I don’t even want you to imagine you doing that … just know that someone cares…
Shuberth
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im am sorry that you feel the need to cut. i did cut before, but i learned it didnt solve anything, instead it made things a lot worse. if you ever need a person to talk to i am here.
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Wow.
Keep writing.
'and now I am no more
because of all my blood on the floor '
Very strong emotion there.... -
I'm sorry you feel this sort of pain, I can relate as I cut and feel that sort of pain also. If you ever need to talk to anyone I'm here.
This is a great write but really sad
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honey this is heart wrenching. its so sad that you feel this way. i'm here for you
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Sweet Natasha, I know right now you feel this is your only way to deal with your pain. And I will not sit here and tell you that you must stop. But I will ask that you either seek help or reach deep down inside yourself to find some other way to deal with your pain. It took me a great deal of time to find another route, but I did. You can also. You just have to believe. As for the poem sweetheart, it is very good. Great imagery and full of emotion. Nice job!
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I can relate. This is very deep and sad :[...So I understand you cut? So do I but I've started to stop, it's hard but you just need to find something that will make you feel better instead of cuting. I hope you try to stop, best of luck to you [:
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Don't cut anymore Natasha. You really need to stop. I know it's very very hard, but it'll help. If only the smallest bit. You hurt so many people when you cut.
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i can relate to this so much, amazing write xxx
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