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scenes

your naked body
with my bed in disarray
night to remember

look out the window
watching the lightning at night
then passionate love

in a white tee shirt
and waiting under a tree
you are in my dreams

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Three senryu I think.

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  • angelique
    September 1, 2008

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    wow

    less words=more emotion
    in your case anyways.
    I love this poem.
    The last line is breathtaking with how it fits with the rest of the poem.
    "you are in my dreams"


  • Flowergirl
    August 30, 2008
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    great you can really say a lot in your poetry.......


  • Dalaney gold member
    August 26, 2008
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    breathtaking, Jeff...
    absolutley, breathtaking.

    Love, Lane


  • Amera gold member
    August 26, 2008

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    Love,
    Amera♥

  • Dalaney gold member
    August 26, 2008

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