I.
I caress your form
thinking of pleasures to come
and I breathe deeply
II.
My fingers follow
serpentine patterns hastened
by your trembling body
III.
Desire overwhelms us
as spontaneity once again shows
how hungry we are.
Author notes
Three sensual Haiku's.
A contest entry
- Sensual Haiku by Dalaney.
1050 points, ended August 26, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Sensual & soft as usual.
Juls
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in a situaton like this i wouldn have thought word choice would have even factored into it, unles your talking body language
oh, you mean for the haiku side of it? i stand corrected, its all about word choice there
seriously though, a well written tripple haiku. you captured the feel very well and true to form
jan ♥
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I'm hungry too!!! but for food
lol..
This was really beautiful dad.. soft and sensual, with a touch of heated intensity.. bravo!! I really love it.
Angel
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Thanks sweetie. Now go make yourself a peanut butter and jelly sandwich. LOL!
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~ Nicolette
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Very sensual write but can be made more senual.
Love
Bin
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Gorgeous.
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Never did understand Haiku but I like this!!!!!!
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Love,
Amera♥
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*shields eyes* Daddy!! You're not meant to do things like that!!!
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Sensuality and hunger...hmmm. A very nice answer to the prompt
Best wishes in the contest dear.
Love Margaret
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Nice work, nice title.
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I caress your form
My fingers follow
Desire overwhelms us
HOW SWEET IT IS. Very well done.
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This is gorgeous, so beautiful and "SENSUAL". you hit the nail on the head
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Thanks Angie.
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phew! thats woke me up and steamed up my computer screen. nicely done.
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LOL! Turn a fan on hun, and have a cool drink of water.
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great
very well done.
personally could have done without the serpentine as i really hate them but are used so sexy here...
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Thanks dear and I used 'serpentine' because it had three syllables as the contest called for 'three Haiku poems’ and Haiku’s are composed from a 5-7-5 syllable count after all. It’s all about the word choice.
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