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Song of the Siren

INTRO:
      Come lonely sailor we'll take thee away
      Into our ocean of magic
      Where sailors before you have all made their way
      Here in our ocean of Magic
      Ah.........Ah.......Ah........Ah..........

VERSE 1:

      Can you hear the song
      That we sing to you?
      Listen to the song of the siren.

      The waves have tossed your ship
      and left you all alone
      Come into my arms lonely sailor.

      Can you hear me?
      Ah.....Ah....Ah....Ah....Ah
      Can you hear me?
      Ah.....Ah....Ah....Ah....Ah     


Chorus:

      AND THE THUNDER ROLLS!
      Waves CRASH upon the shore
      AND THE THUNDER ROLLS!
      As if to welcome one more soul
      AND THE THUNDER ROLLS!

Verse #2
      Come to me
      I'll sing you into sleep
      Come to me
      I'll give you lasting peace
      Ah.....Ah......Ahhh.....Ah

Chorus:
      AND THE THUNDER ROLLS!
      Lightening FLASHES in the sky
      AND THE THUNDER ROLLS
      Waves CRASHING on the shore
      AND THE THUNDER ROLLS!
      The sailor takes his fial breath
      And gives up the ghost.
      Ahhhh......Ahhhhh.....Ahhhhh....Ahh

Finale:
      Oh our sweet sailor
      you're with us to stay
      here in our ocean of magic
      all of your pain
      and heartache is gone
      here in our ocean of magic.
      AhhhhhhhAhhhhhhhAhhhhhhAhhhhhhh
     
      (in a whisper)
      LISTEN TO THE SONG OF THE SIREN

 
     

Author notes

This is an original song which is sung by three women in long, wispy, flowing dresses of blue green. The music is ethereal and without instrumentation. Playing in the background is the sound of the ocean during a terrible storm. There is three part harmony of only the voices over the sound of the ocean.

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  • ChickenPie
    August 26, 2008
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    enchanted

    grandmother this is eerily amazing

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    August 26, 2008

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    Hello.

    In your last chorus "final" has an "n" missing. I can understand the obvious relevance your words have to the Sirens, and thus do feel that your words have the needed undertones of seduction, promise of better things, love, etc. But I would really need to hear the actual music, and then the amalgamation of all, to really give a fair analysis of this. You say the music is ethereal without instrumentation, so what would you be using?

    My regards.