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Forever

Watching the pain cast shadows underneath your eyes
tore me apart inside- icy blows ripped into my heart
Meeting your eyes and not knowing who I was seeing
You don't know how my heart burned in flashing flames
when you walked away to avoid having to talk seriously with me


Seeing you pretend to not need anyone to talk to
because she had me for that
Listening to you calculate each syllable before you said it
because you couldn't bear to let me in
Knowing the pain waiting to fall from behind your eyes in raindrops
because I was afraid and forgot to take you with me when i pulled away
Feeling how much you couldn't stand me that you silenced my cries
because the secrets racing in my veins didn't fall to be carried by you

Raindrops fell every night- little drops of guilt for what I couldn't do
clouds let loose their grief at not being able to fight for a loved one
When no one was looking warm rain stained my cheeks with dark sorrow
the wind chased questions whose answers scared me  through my mind- picked up by air

Drowning  in the swells of a raging storm, full of  words I was afraid to say
fearing having to face how badly your heart was torn by what I should have told you
Crooked strikes of lightening hit me full on realising that for all I thought I'd die for you
My sacrifice threatening to destroy me from inside was giving up what time I had left
the last weeks of 8th grade so you could figure out if you could look at me and not cry

Fiery reds, ocean blues, blades of spring grass green appeared in everything you wore
as deep as you had to reach beneath the fire waves of your soul to find the courage
all the rainbows apart of you wouldn't be complete without the color I mean to you
Losing each other would be losing ourselves- I don't think I can stay true to myself
and say when I look at me - you aren't t here in so much of what I've become.

all the memories of what we once had were painful to relive because I hated the thought I might lose you
It drove me insane hearing you tell me 'everything happens for a reason' -that that could be right
but now I might believe it- I held on by letting go and you pushed aside the piercing pain
our friendship happened for a reason- best friends tied beyond anything- we are forever



Author notes

Barack is a total gangsta, I'm a little ashamed at putting this in because Obama is trying to represent change and a better future and isn't a gansta in any way. I don't discriminate but its not really a great life , I don't mean morally or anyone just in general- its a dangerous one and it is sad that some people don't have more of a future.


1. Losing you and trying not to



5. Just when you thought you had it all,
it all falls apart.

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  • Shannon62875
    October 19, 2008

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    aww

    This as a pretty good write!! I really enjoyed reading ths.. Keep up the greatwork and good luck in my contest!!!

    Shannon*Leah


  • Wall Door Salad
    October 6, 2008

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    "Seeing you pretend to not need anyone to talk to
    because she had me for that"
    "Raindrops fell every night- little drops of guilt for what I couldn't do
    clouds let loose their grief at not being able to fight for a loved one"

    nice write. very touching


  • misshugglebugglez
    September 6, 2008

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    wow, i really liked it. I love your emotion, it brings good feeling to the poem. my favorite lines were these:
    "Fiery reds, ocean blues, blades of spring grass green appeared in everything you wore
    as deep as you had to reach beneath the fire waves of your soul to find the courage". Great work!
    -pb fudge (luvs ya)
    by the way, sorry if i offended u w/ the obama thing. u can get rid of it if u want. =) i just really like the word gangsta. i won't dq you if u get rid of it. =)thanks for entering, and good luck!


  • sideways hourglass
    September 2, 2008

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    This was quite nice, but just needs some tightening. It was wordy - so a lot of your good imagery and ideas were drowned out by them.
    I felt this though, lots of emotion.
    Overall pretty good, just need some polish. Thanks for entering and good luck.

    • Writing0Freedom
      September 5, 2008
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      What parts in particular needed tightening? I'd like to polish this up .

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