Like a symphony
subtle melodies intertwining
creating something greater
than themselves…
You and I combine in
a flow of unity
of love
and find perfection
in the discordant notes
of our lives…
We find harmony
and the strength
to cast our masks aside.
Author notes
Option 3.
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: http://whitewave-moth.deviantart.com/art/music-54835334
30 – 50 words (43 used)
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie... Are You Interested?? by Sweet Impatience.
1025 points, ended August 26, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome but I Won't Turn Down Fluffy One's Either :D
Comments
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Such a beautiful write. ^_^ It reminds me of something I would write.
"Like a symphony
subtle melodies intertwining
creating something greater
than themselves…"
I think of Requiem For A Dream when I read this stanza. [probably because I've become obsessed with that song recently
] I love it. ^_^
"You and I combine in
a flow of unity
of love
and find perfection
in the discordant notes
of our lives…"
I love the connection between music and life in this stanza. How you describe it as "discordant notes". Life, indeed, is a flurry of discordance; but we can still find perfection in the ones we love. :]
A beautiful write and a well-deserved trophy. 
-Lily♥
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Excellent as always. You are too good.
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Ooh, cast our masks aside. Very good!
Congratulations on the silver.
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this is a very beautiful poem. written from your heart.
I really love the 2nd & the 3rd stanzas.. Outstanding take on the prompt and a Fantastic job with the poem
good luck
kat
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This is really really beautiful.. so full of love and heartfelt emotions..bravo!! best of luck in the contest!!
Angel
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beautiful loved the vividness of it. a wonderful take on the prompt. good luck.
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Wow, beautiful.. I like the idea of the 'harmony' in this poem, its both a musical term and a spiritual term. Good luck in the contest!!
-RoseDaughter-
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