China doll purity,
masking mummified reveries,
her Geisha existence,
played with dirge in soul.
Survival's facade,
cloaking her extraterrestrial esteem,
always feeling alienated from realty.
One more performance
for his bed stage,
hearing the alien sonata of dreams
abducting her tears,
visions of hari kari knife
subdue by biting lips.
Author notes
Option 3
50 words
http://whitewave-moth.deviantart.com/art/music-54835334
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie... Are You Interested?? by Sweet Impatience.
1025 points, ended August 26, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Intriguing write of life and death struggle of personalities, and love weaved mysteriously throughout what would seem something similar to the Phantom of the Opera tragedy. A wonderful take on the prompt!
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great work grandpa! well deserving of the hm if not MORE! I hope you're ok.
love you LOADS
xxx
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Lovely work, the description brings the reader into the poem, seeking death over the life choosen to survive. Many are drawn to life in limelight to find it is not what was envisioned, to be engulfed by sadness.
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Congratulations on winning the honorable winner trophy in this! Nice job in working on this prompt. Very touching to read!! THANKS!!
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"masking mummified reveries" "played with dirge in soul."
"hearing the alien sonata of dreams" these are the lines that I love so much from your wonderful poem
you've taken this prompt, written something brilliant. the imagery is completely outstanding. you've done this prompt great justice..
good luck
kat
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this is a really good take on the prompt every line is beautifully constructed. good luck to you
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Beautiful poem, Written so elegantly..
Good luck
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"Alien sonata"= brilliance... That would make a spectacular contest-prompt! You have taken this picture and completely twisted it, made it your own. That's what is truly spectacular about your work, my friend. Well done, and good luck to you!
Laura
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