Golden brown hues swirl like waves around me,
My heart and my sole opening, living free,
Twirling and laughing, sweetly she sings,
The path so clear spreads like butterfly wings,
Slowly she strides, the path clearer,
The magic nearby is coming nearer,
The way that it moves through her soul,
Its heat consumes my body whole.
Author notes
Its for a contest by the lovely AngelWithDarkWings. The prompt is from this address: http://frozenstarro.deviantart.com/art/The-magic-path-45554068
It was 6 words over the word limit, but I'm sorry, i couldn't cut it down anymore. It isn't my best write ever, but for some reason my creative writing is not so strong.
A contest entry
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Comments
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thankyou for entering. I hope you enjoy the contest and have fun.
take care
message me for anything
Rhythm Child
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Impressive! I don't know if it was intentional or not, but I really, really like the symbolism you've included in here. I had to remind myself that you were talking about autumn, because the way you speak of it almost sounds like you're talking about a crush or something you love. Your word choice is great, and I like how you refer to autumn as "her", as well as the personification. This is exactly what I was looking for with this contest! Thank you!
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It's always nice to see an autumn poem around here. I don't like that season to be honest, well... I don't like it because it brings coldness and shorter days.
I do love the colors it brings though
Anyway, thank you for entering the contest!
Leander -
You captured the picture well, thank you for including the link in your author's notes. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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good poem!!!
Best wishes in the contest!
Magikal Faiery Poet
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Ahh I just had to comment on this poem again..
I think this is one of your loviest poems Miki, although all of them are beautiful. It is quite simple yet sooo incredibly exquisite, it warms my heart, its pure sweetness it just divine.
you write like an angel Miki
- Katie
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lovely my darling
keep writing
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WOW. WOW. I absolutely love this poem!
It touches my heart, it is so stunning in both how it is written and its breath-taking descriptions.. it is an excellent motivational poem. it's brightened up my day! Thanks so much for sharing it
You really have such an amazing talent Miki, it's incredible!
xxx
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Very nice!
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why i think that this is really a beautiful poem that you have penned here. and good luck to you.
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Wonderful
A very creative take on the picture. Such a beautiful expression. Best of luck in the contest.
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thanks lots
For some reason it isnt letting me rate the coment
but if i could id def give u 5 stars
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This is lovely, sweetie... I love the way you've worded things, so elegantly-calm and soft. Beautifully-written, and good luck in the contest!
Laura
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this is a great poem, it has a smooth, calming feel to it. the imagery that you've used it excellent. outstanding job.. remember, what you may think isn't good, but generally speaking other poets may not agree with you..
you did an outstanding job with both the poem and the prompt.
good luck
kat
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