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A Childhood Fantasy

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no one is there to save her

   and no one is there to hear

     she can't escape feeling confused

        when she is being hurt and abused

              she knows she is going to be hit

                   though did nothing to deserve it

                       but she has no where to run to 

                         and has no way to stop the abuse

                              her life is a terrifying nightmare

                                 whenever he jerks her by the hair

                                    life would be better if he were to die

                                        she would really love to watch him fly

                                              if only she could steady her nerves

                                                  and push him real hard down the stairs

 

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"15 lines, more or less". Contest image: "Child Abuse" by Photobucket, courtesy of Desire.

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  • Desire gold member
    August 30, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: A Childhood Fantasy
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: but she has nowhere to run- this tugs because I am reminded of adult women used as sex slaves who have their passports taken- can't trust the Police- nowhere to go-no one to turn to- and if an adult female is having this struggle- imagine a young child- especially when there are adults who associate such tragedies as something the child *possibly* made up- the parent-guardian *appears* nice and why would he or she do something to harm- unimaginable- Only if the perpetrators would disappear- the world would be a happier place- but then the victim would need to be deprogrammed of the trauma endured- shown that all people are not like the big bad wolf etc- A sad cycle to witness- especially if even the authorities who speak of being a protector does not hear and in some cases do not want to hear- just another paycheck for some who have not walked in the child's shoes However this to be interpreted
    Whether metaphor or symbolism
    Hopefully the above comment makes some sense~
    Excellent take on the prompt ~
    Powerful images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Voice and Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 30, 2008
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      Thank you Desire.

      This was a great theme. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for the HM, and Congratuations to ALL the winners!!! Peace, Cyn

  • haleymax2010
    August 26, 2008
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    this is a sad but awsome poe


  • arafura gold member
    August 26, 2008

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    Dark and powerful and compelling. The reader wishes she could push him down the stairs. But he is too big and loud and dominant... she is too small and too fragile. Great insight poet!


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 30, 2008
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      Thank you John,

      I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, and appreciate your kindness. Peace, Cyn

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