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Not Again!

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No! Not again

My dad has been drinking

I try hiding in the corner of my room

and cover my ears

.

Yet, I still can hear him downstairs

yelling and cussing at my mommy,

and then, a loud slap!

My mommy is crying...

I'm trembling;

tears running down my cheeks

I must not cry out loud or I’ll be next

.

Suddenly, a loud scream,

“Where is that little bitch!”

Footsteps...

He's coming up the stairs

I pray to God,

“Please protect me.”

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  • Desire gold member
    August 30, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Not Again
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: I try hiding in the corner of my room- what is so sad is that the parent is unable to muster strength to defend against the abuser- I'm shown an example of a Lioness when a new Lion takes over the pride- he kills all the offspring that is not his- a small percentage of Lioness'- will defend her cubs but the majority will not and just accept the genocide- After reading again I am shown how the *bottle* seems to give the man super human strength- so he or she thinks (temporarily) to let loose- just lash out without cause for concern- cast blame- point fingers of fault at spouse- children- instead of looking inward to deal with the problem causing strife- it seems the *bottle* and the abuse becomes the answer- Very sad to envision However this to be interpreted
    Whether metaphor or symbolism
    Hopefully the above comment makes some sense~
    Excellent take on the prompt ~
    Powerful images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Voice and Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~



    • Poetic-Theorem silver member
      August 30, 2008
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      Desire
      Thank you sooooooo much for the wonderful comments. It is always a great pleasure to hear from you. Your comments are so encouraging...they wake up my muse that is typically MIA
      Thanks again my sweet friend

      David


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 27, 2008

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    Incredibly sad... and real!! This is far too often a reality for many children.. breaks my heart!!

    Wonderful write!


  • Lily of the Valley
    August 26, 2008

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    A sad story which unfortunately is all too common for many children. Phisical abuse is a terrible ordeal to cope with and hopefully one day it comes to an end but the resulting mental anguish is something that may last for year, if not a lifetime. I think your poem, though fairly short, shows clearly the fear these children live with on a daily basis.


    • Poetic-Theorem silver member
      August 26, 2008
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      Sue
      Thank you so much for the kind comments. It is always lovely to hear from you. I'm not writing much but ever so often a spark from a contest will motivate me. My muse seems to be MIA
      Take care my dear friend

      David


  • stavykm gold member
    August 25, 2008

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    Wow Powerful

    This is so sad and you speak as the child which is excellent with this pic. The title is great Not Again, oh how I could so relate to this poem unforutunately.

    I pray to God
    Please protect me.

    Oh how I remember those same exact prayers. Excellent job and best of luck in the contest.
    Many Blessings
    Much Love
    Kelle Marie


    • Poetic-Theorem silver member
      August 26, 2008
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      Kelle
      Thank you sooooo much for the sweet comments.
      Child Abuse must end! A nice dream that hopefully one day will come true.
      Thanks again
      Take care

      David


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    August 25, 2008

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    My Darling Husband,

    Wow! You are good at these free writes baby; this is dark, intense and says so much more than it seems.

    Best of luck!
    ♥
    Stay safe
    I love you, always
    ~Manda


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    August 25, 2008

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    This was so profound David...The picture gave me chills and your words added to them. It is such a horrible situation that so many are in.. Your words were powerful.
    Good luck in the contest.
    Nor


    • Poetic-Theorem silver member
      August 25, 2008
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      Nor
      Thank you for the heartfelt comments...
      The image is both heartbreaking and powerful
      I hope my words brought it so justice
      Abuse to our little angel [and to everyone] must end
      Thanks again

      David

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 25, 2008

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    Ugh this made my heart sink some people need to be shot on sight for the way that they treat children it is very sad Goodluck in this contest


    • Poetic-Theorem silver member
      August 25, 2008
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      CJ
      Thank you as always for the kind comments. This was a powerful image to work with that speaks so loudly. Abuse to our little ones [in fact abuse to anyone] must end.
      Thanks again sweetie

      David

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