those violin eyes
show honeysuckle yearning
and my mouth is dry
melodic moans sigh
to match music's notation
hidden beneath skirt
strum a bit closer
with that symphony of touch
while I slip inside
A contest entry
- Sensual Haiku by Dalaney.
1050 points, ended August 26, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Whoa!!!! Damn sexy!! I give this three thumbs up too!!
Woot
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Nice job Mark, all the best in the contest bro.
mj.
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This contest is bringing out the best in people's writing... and I have to leave for work without a chance to enter... just as well, because I won't be outshone by all this talent.
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Beautiful!
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Nicely penned indeed...luck to you.
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Very beautifully sensual bro! Wow and whew! Great job, best of luck.
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A symphony of sensuality... wonderfully written with a consistent melodic theme that's sure to make Lane smile
Well done, Mark!
Ken
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Oh This is not what I thought it would be you did a beautiful job with it goodluck in her contest much love always be well
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Music and sensuality always seem to go hand in hand, yours I can hear the melody and feel the rhythm
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Looks like you ditched punctuation & capitalizations--awesome!!
Apparently, there are 66+ ways to write haiku, so this must be one of them...LMAO.
This isn't the way I'm taught to write them! I can't even do basic haiku very well.
I think you captured sensual-ness w/o going too far.
"violin eyes" is SO cool!!!!!! This would be cool in a normal poem too.
Good luck, I think Lane will like this
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lol
I wanted to go on.. but she only wanted 3. lol -
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You're a sick pup. LMAO
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