My mind is overflowing with despair and pain
I do my best to keep it constantly drained..
It's like I got water clogging up my brain
The heat from fiery thoughts border on insane
I find comfort, in the too short absence of rain..
Sloshing through these puddles of mind
Resting for a moment alongside a lake I find
A moment's tranquility..
Interrupted by other thoughts of mine
Normality so rare, now what is it this time?
There just has to be a foolproof way to unclog
What seems to be a constant.. thoughts soaked n' sogged
Inside a mind that's forever water logged..
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt! by Nicada.
550 points, ended August 26, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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you hurt and feel a great responsibility for others. amazing write.
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what a nice...
comment! these are the very type of words that cause me to wanna keep
penning pieces , because i feed off the positive energy that these great and encouraging comments give me..thank you!
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i would like very much to write like this. It is almost as if you are having one long stream of thought, but it makes sense, it's not chopped up or jagged. You are a talented writer, and I will be reading you as often as you post. Love, Lane
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Now I know your name, Richard. Well, I'm impressed with this, you are so multi-faceted. God Bless.
LL
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LL! l.o.l.
yeah, GUESS THE GIG IS UP! L.O.L. thanks again for all your kindness and support, I can't express enough how much it means to me!
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My mind is often water logged... sigh.. I blame the meds!! lol
Excellent poem hun!! Congrats on the Gold
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Hey! l.o.l.at..
least you got that to blame!
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Congratulations on the gold trophy, great imagery and a clever interpretation of the prompt!
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Hi my friend!
Thank you so much, and I appreciate all your support and positive feedback.
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Congrats on the gold! Very great imagery throughout, and I loved your use of words, especially, sogged, water logged, "sloshing through these puddles of mind" very well done!
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thank you
I appreciate your reading and commenting on my work. I will visit your'home' soon!
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You did a great job relating to the picture prompt. This is a unique and thought provoking interpretation. I like this very much. Thanks so much for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty
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AAWW..
You have me blushing all over now! l.o.l. thanks my friend for you kind words!
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Great job. I loved this one write on!
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Well, at least the water on the brain will keep the flames from those fiery thoughts from getting out of hand! Pam
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sounds like your brain
might need an outlet. Pull the plug and take a vacation. loved the poem. another WOW!
rissa
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You really said a lot with this one...Sometimes it becomes so overwhelming. I loved how you wrote this..
I know my brain gets clogged and I just want to drain it..
Great writing baby...
Nor
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very great impressive wsork here knuckle head and did i add a very serious piece comming from you nice job hon
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Well I was..
going to respond, but I see there telling me to be quiet! l.o.l. j.k. anywho..Thanks jewels! appreciate the read and comment my friend!
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Wow pretty interesting analogy of the way your thoughts are working right now. I had fun reading this, even despite the subject, because your rhymes and flow is so perfect. I hope ya get unclogged soon
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Thank you
I so appreciate your concern, and comments, but i'm ok(at least for the moment! l.o.l.)
this was merely what I thought of in relation to the pic. prompt.
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