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Not Good Enough


 

Not good enough

never will be

You mark my words

just wait and see

 

You never listen

don't cover your ears

Look at me dammit

and dry up those tears

 

Not good enough

you do nothing right

You make me sick

get out of my sight

 

Over and over and over again

no matter what I do, I'll never win 

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  • Desire gold member
    August 13
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    Thank You Again!

    Thank You for sharing Your Gems of Wisdom: Not Good Enough
    ~
    I'm Blessed to read Your verse again~
    Honored to have You enter~
    Thankies for Your Patience
    Many Blessings to You in my contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes & judging will be done shortly
    with much love and light~ Desire~*~

  • June-bug
    August 30, 2008

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    You have depicited the picture in this perfectly. Even without the picture you words create the seen. It is sad when so many children grow up in this type of environment. This tugs at the heart. Awesome Job!

  • Desire gold member
    August 30, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Not Good Enough
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: You mark my words- this pains the Heart for it is like a curse being placed upon the child- the parent is supposed to Lift Spirit not tear it down- shred every piece of Dignity attached to bone- Also reference to words: Look at me dammit- the feeling of having to look the *beast* in the eyes- especially when the *beast* is enraged- Sad to inhale~ Tight rhyme You have brought forth~ and after reading again- for some reason- I kept getting word: incest- butttttttttttttttttttttt in reference to parent disconnected to child- did not see child as a part of him- the anger, the resentment I keep being shown distorted the bond- destroyed the Innocence a father is supposed to protect not violate However this to be interpreted
    Whether metaphor or symbolism
    Hopefully the above comment makes some sense~
    Excellent take on the prompt ~
    Powerful images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Voice and Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~



  • Angels Whispers gold member
    August 29, 2008

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    OOps

    So sorry, silly me got caught up in the poem and forgot to give you the much earned applauses..so here they are lol

  • Angels Whispers gold member
    August 29, 2008
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    heart felt


    Oh boy those words send chills down my spine.So many children and adults hear these as they are screamed at them.
    No one should be made to feel worthless,its a horrible feeling to have,emotional abuse is just as bad as physical abuse, both harm, both scar.
    It really sickens me, knowing that there are many beautiful angels out there in this cold cruel world in need of some tender loving care,and unable to recieve it.
    You have written this well my friend, hits one right in the stomach.
    I wish you all the best in the contest,
    Blessings of love and happiness I send to you.
    ~Angel-anne~


  • Puppydog gold member
    August 26, 2008

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    SO VIVID AND SAD!!!!!

    In this picture a kid is being made to seem so small and insigificant but I can relate to this as me ex did much the same thing to me for many years until I had finally had enough and left. I feel there is not one single person on this earth that should be made to feel small and not worth anything.


  • Frozentearz
    August 26, 2008

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    Sigh. very true to some and the image is so very haunting.
    Best of luck to you in the contest.
    Warm thoughts.
    Frozentearz


  • Star Shine
    August 26, 2008

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    Words are the most hurtful weapons, they linger in the memory of the recipient longer than anything. We need to remember not to instill lasting hurt for a moment's outburst. Years of hearing those old tapes playing how worthless we are can cancel out years of our achievements. Only love open our hearts to believe we are meaningful children of God. Well done, well exp-ressed.


  • The Poetic Angel
    August 26, 2008

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    good write sis

    the words that hurt and never go away

    love you sis

    xxx judie xxx


  • dustookie2
    August 25, 2008

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    WOW

    I feel the power of these words ringing out hun that mean spirit that is never you Yet you capture it as my eyes fill with salt water doing the girlie panda eye waltz with you. What an excellent take on this prompt...some poem stand alone need no support the might of the poet's words demand attention and respect hun you show you talent Exposed raw and submissive emotional as we who read find our own dark footprints.
    Erase the scars and show your light my good bad girl rocks

    Good luck in the contest.


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    August 25, 2008

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    Brilliant

    Great take on pic prompt
    I saw Desire's contest, and then, I read your piece. Your write blew me away. You captured the prompt to perfection.
    This write is sad and profoundly true.
    Constant yelling at children is abusive and can leave permanent emotional scars...a sad destiny


    " Over and over and over again
    no matter what I do, I'll never win"

    Well penned
    Wish you the best in the contest
    take care
    David

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