I was sure
I heard you snore
out frustration
and your mouth curled
out nightmares
everytime you exhaled.
they said pigs
never see the sky
so I embraced
the bedroom floor
observed scratches
that our shoes made
when we kissed
mornings
and collided
in blind instances.
Author notes
inspired by the lovely Rowan.
A contest entry
- My Auntie K! by Allyce May.
1700 points, ended September 18, 2008, 5 entries
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I agree with blind alley...as well as loving the rest of it. I must have twenty-something bookmarks now. ;s
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absolutely loved the second stanza.
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This is fitting. She will relate. Well done.
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lol Yep Rowan will relate to this one
C
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I love you, Esha
I know i dont' comment on you enough, but you really have a way of making images fresh.. they are new and I see things from a different angle when I read your work.
My sister pea will love this I know it...
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The title caught me hard. With this type of imagery - I wish I could write like you.
And sometimes I just wish I could write.
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