me
my mind
was wrong
wrong about everything
and now...
now everything is right
my truth I have always known
down ever deep
now all rising
even while crossing
the bridge
all thanks
for I have found
my heart again.
Author notes
Picture prompt.. Please Credit: Hand_of_Sorrow_by_Iardacil
Perhaps still editing... if okay.
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by Angelflower.
600 points, ended August 30, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Welcome any sincere response and critique
Comments
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How beautiful. Sometimes life can seem like there can be no love between two people.. but it's so refreshing when we can prove it wrong!
you did such a wonderful job!! I really love it! thank you very much for sharing! best of luck in the contest!
Angel
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this is so real and so beautiful. the dawning of that most sincere moment, when a deep breath is exhaled and all that is known is clarity and belief!
beautimous my friend
Gillyxxxx
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In a nutshell!
Thank you my so wonderful friend.
Sol x
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My favorite line, "even while crossing the bridge...". Doesn't it seem sometimes that we are ever crossing bridges, sometimes moving back sometimes forward, but always the crossing is new and unexpected...well, seems to me thus.. ...your pen has stirred the deep waters of my own mind/heart-again.. ...A different ripple has touched me than this that you have sent forth, but touched me nonetheless...and to continue: "all thanks, for I [too] have found my heart again."...Peace my brother, Rhonda
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So pleased you have... though I doubt you ever really lost it.
... and yes, I think this life is like a bridge and also that we can have views of the other side while still crossing it in order to meet ourselves well on the other side where we always ever were.
Thank you Rhonda
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for I have found
my heart again
Beautiful.X
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... and such a beautiful heart it is.
X
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for me ... there is no separation between the two
meaning mind and heart are one entity
so if one is wrong, so is the other..
but I like the way you capture the awakening, the sudden awareness that what was thought -- or felt
was not the only perspective to exist.
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I think that ultimately heart, mind, self, soul are all the same thing, only having different aspects. For me, by 'heart' I always think of it as the very centre, that which in itself is before any conditioning and therefore that which we can safely return to. The conditions much resulting from what I would refer to as the mind; the way that it channels things and affects the conditioning of the heart, or reasons in a way which can 'clean' it.
One thing that I definitely don't at all mean, by 'heart', is a centre of emotion. I do mean that which is closest to the Essence of all things, in itself remains pure and if open, is a place of immediate perception.
Thank you for your, as ever, much appreciated comment.
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Yes and I tend to agree. For me ( meaning this is only as this applies to me -- and not a 'critique' ) though the word 'mind' fits it better ...perhaps because I tend to connect 'heart' with emotion and for me that place of immediate perception is in the mind.
You're welcome
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really beautiful, it would seem like you were able to think about just what she was thinking. Very good!
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Oh my, this is brilliant! I love how you've interpreted the picture and created such depth of emotion. There's such a feeling of peace and acceptance that emanates from your words - "now everything is right
my truth I have always known" - simply divine!
Thank you for sharing this, and all the best in the contest,
Luck.
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See -- this is the epiphany we all crave, and I think that like waves we do ebb and flow, rise and fall, there is never a constant, you know?
The heart exists and we acknowledge it, I guess that is a constant, but we are not always prepared to share it, we are not always inclined to do any more than protect it.
This poem brings to mind the moment when we realize we want to share it with others again; when trust is worth the risk of having someone know the secrets we hold in the chambers of our own in return for sharing the secrets held in another.
It takes time, but when that moment comes it is beautiful.
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Your eyes are a real gift!
Just wrote this as it spilled out. Your comment opens up so well what I'd hoped it to express, far better than I could have said it in this way.
Yes, the heart is constant but what visits it is ever changing and can steal us from that constancy so easily. I agree with all you've said and also that protecting it is a good thing and that this is different from simply feeling constricted. We choose what is allowed into our heart and those choices aren't necessarily always the best ones. Maybe though, even these, stir it in a way that prepares it for receiving that which is better?
Thank you... such friend of mine!
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