Bridge of Karma

Dedicated to an 'Angel' on the bridge!

Oh No!
Bang...
Where did he go...
I hang..
In suspense,
No recompense..
He went on ahead,
Now he's dead,
Told me to wait,
Like I was at heaven's gate,
Was it fate,
Karma..
What a drama,
I want to be with him,
This is grim.

Author notes

Wrote two versions, the above is the 10-15 line one for this wonderful contest, (thanks to Angelfower.. Sis for this contest), the longer version is below.

Bridge of Karma (Longer version)

Dedicated to an 'Angel' on the bridge!

Oh No!
Bang...
Where did he go...
I hang..
In suspense,
No recompense..
He went on ahead,
Now he's dead,
Told me to wait,
Like I was at heaven's gate,
Was it fate,
Karma..
What a drama,
I want to be with him,
This is grim.
But he can swim,
Did he drop,
Into the ravene,
Let me swap..
This devastating scene,
For something nice,
Put fatality on ice,
He made it across,
But he got cross,
Cos I was scared,
To venture on,
Anon,
Bridge too far feared,
Nervous me,
Angry he,
Smoke from his ire,
Like a pyre,
Bridge over troubled water,
To much for his daughter,
Scaredy cat,
How about that!
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Allpoetry.com Contest
August 2008
Picture Prompt
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Write something beautiful and...moving..
10 poets
10-15 lines( No more then 15)
Picture prompt.. Please Credit: Hand_of_Sorrow_by_Iardacil
Be creative!!
Angel
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Picture Credit: Credit: Hand_of_Sorrow_by_Iardacil

Picture depicts:
Female in long cream floaty dress with long dark hair stood at the start of a wooden suspension bridge with her hands clasping her head, smoke ahead of her making what lies there invisible.

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Comments

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Angelflower
August 30, 2008

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Oh! lol. I love it!! it made me stratch my head and laugh! lol. you did such a wonderful job Sis! I really loved it! thank you very much for sharing!! best of luck!

Angel
celadia
August 26, 2008

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This almost reminds me of a hanging and the condemned man having his last thoughts. Love the karma in this.
- Kazytc
  August 26, 2008
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  Thanks millions!
  Thanks millions, for your fab and kind review you are very
  inspiring and encouraging.
  Glad you liked it.
  Best of luck in all of your contests, hope you win Gold in them all.
  Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
  Kaz.
  Kazytc XX